Would be happy to lend you some Gamefound-specific tip, it can be a little hard to navigate. Shoot me an email.
Well, now I have to ask why do you consider page 147 to be important? Because I don't think it is mundane at all, the importance feels obvious, to me. As for why it was the thing that finally made it click for me- i mean, its just Samantha's biggest L ever! She replaced an Obviously impactful moment with a generic enemy. But its the last line that seals the deal, where she says "I suppose you could still play the original version if you wanted to instead." Lethal amounts of designer insecurity stabbed my heart with the pain of every generic shitty ass 3.5E dungeon I'd ever made. And yet... when you combine it with the text right below it, this amateur, cowardly sentence becomes the hardest thing ever. That is when I realized what was going on, and I loved it.
Also re-reading now, I just got an extra chuckle out of noticing that since this is the only time where the Fallen Paladin enemy appears, and they appear alone, it means their Oath of Burning Vengeance ability is TOTALLY WORTHLESS! Samantha would be so ashamed but Charlotte would love it. God this books kicks ass.