Oh...that hit right in the feels.
A rather short story but really hits close to home for me. There wasn’t a lot to say here, a person that wouldn’t be accepted where they are finds a place (and a person) more welcoming. It may be classic, but it’s sweet and done well, and that’s all that matters.
However, my biggest gripe is with the presentation of the story. Aside from things like sprites floating on hiding the window and the final image being a non-transparent, single color white (I think it should be or with a simple bg is fine too).
The writing is…for lack of a better word, exhausting to read through. The latter half was beautifully done, though for the cops scene, I can’t really feel the tension. Perhaps a better use of sprites/expression and writing could’ve helped with that. For the first half though, the writing felt like it tried too hard to be flowery, and the end result is cramming so much into a sentence that hurts the flow of narration by a lot. In some scenes, an especially a despairing/tired character like MC at the start, it may have been better to just stick with simpler prose, and split his thoughts into more manageable parts.
I kind of wished there was something more with the mom at the end, maybe like a cutoff, once and for all instead of just taking the police’s words and throw it in the wind, but that’s nothing too major.
It was the headlights, then it was Ridge, and finally it was a new future-freedom. The ‘Light in the Dark’ is always present in the story in one way or another, guiding MC away from his darkness. Again, it hits really close to home for me, maybe a bit too close, but that’s a good thing.
P.S If I have a wolfman in my bed for every time an entry about a DILF wolf trucker saving you from darkness I’d have 2 wolfmen. More please cause 2 is too little I fear.
Rating: 5433
Edit: Rebalancing of rating to 5444