Spoiler Alert!
I really love the way the story was told, although, aside from the first scene switch, everything else was rather sudden. As a result, when reading (at least for me) the focus was more on placing the scenes on a concrete timeline rather than really resonating with the character and creating a sense of immersion in the story (which is fine, if the intention was for the reader to view the story in a more holistic way).
Some scenes also doesn’t have a satisfying end like the church scene, like it just cuts and that’s pretty jarring (idk if that’s the intention but there isn’t any transition like screen shake into the last one so I assume that the scene just ends there instead of being interrupted).
Perhaps I could surmise that there are similarities between the way the relationship between MC and the 2 wolves develop (namely the Lugh sex scene followed by the Randall scene about the church), though I’m not sure how much of this is correct (since the scenes before this seemed to just be switching between the 2 wolves instead of bearing any deeper meaning.
For presentation, the prose was really good, and the sprites are even better. Oh and I love that fountain CG at the end. The main menu was a bit bright for the buttons (not the start button guide existing on your game page 😭😭). Not to mention the Jam sprite jumpscare lmaoo, you could’ve made them fade in or sth (and if you want it to be an interruption, try accompanying it with an vshake or hshake effect).
For the theme, Lugh seems to be the ‘Light’ here, with the ‘Dark’ being after that scene with Randall. Although what happened to Lugh at the end? Are they in a relationship? Or did he also leave? (Maybe answering that question in the ending with the mention/lack of mention about him might be better than just MC trying to let go of Randall).
P.S I would love it if the MC sprite was utilized more I’m ngl, maybe in those 1 on 1 convos.
Rating: 4444
Edit: Rebalancing of rating to 5444