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A short story that doesn’t overstay it’s welcome. I love the premise of a heist, though for such a ‘important’ operation that the MC made it seemed (it wasn’t actually), I’m surprised he would just pick a seeming random flower thingy to put on his suit + there wasn’t any other security measures in place other than 1 ‘Angel’. It hurts the stakes just a bit, but the focus is on the MEN anyway. Speaking of the Baron, maybe him spilling those spicy drama secrets was too fast (especially the uncle killing and the exiling; unless it’s already public knowledge which it doesn’t seem to be). The dynamic between characters is really refreshing though, it plays a bit on the difference between class, and there was some interesting thing going on between Felicia and MC too. I wish we could’ve seen more from the third member of the heist (sth like coms but idk if they have that tech) but it’s fine. Also some terms like ‘Ghosting’ and the function of the pendant are unclear but it’s probably due to jam constraints.
Presentation wise, I love your art style! The backgrounds and the textbox really fits the setting you want to convey, and the characters are HOT HOT. One thing though, the music err on the side of feeling a bit too whimsical (?) for such a setting so it does take away from the immersion a bit. The writing is good, too.
The massive lighthouse would’ve sufficed on being the theme, but the relationship between the two could also counts as an interpretation of ‘Light in the Dark’ (oh and also the Baron’s… 🤤🤤).
P.S MC IS SO HOTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTT I NEEEEEDDDDD
Rating: 5344
Edit: Rebalancing of rating to 5345