Thank you for your service.
Really what the hell, cuz this presentation is too good man. I love the UI and all extra care to make the entire thing felt consistent and unique. The audio work is amazing and even all the subtle details are covered (like the radiation noise gets more frequent as the scale goes up)(probably getting the best audio direction I’m ngl). Aside from a few problems said by armoredopossum about the Karsk scene at the end, I also wonder whether having the flashlight system (which seemed like the intended way to read that scene) is necessary at all. Cause if anything, the sprite looked more like they are wearing a visor that provides night vision instead of a flashlight, but maybe it’s just me. Another thing is 2 quick menu UIs, which might be overboard (?), but to be fair, its different vibes for different scenes in the story, though there might’ve been some middle ground to be achieved there.
Speaking of different vibes, for the plot, I felt like I was constantly being pushed between genres, which is loosely connected to the plot. The first scene leans too hard into telling, which imo somewhat hurts the impact of the later scenes (especially with the date scene right behind it, might as well show that first before telling that imo). It does provide some background information about the plot though, so there should be some balance between what information be told and what’s better to show instead (this also applies to the one scene where Luc is allegedly ded). Such important plot point and character development just to be mentioned in passing really hurts the story. I’ll just say all them jokes are a coping mechanism to elevate his feelings for Luc somehow (but if not then MC got over it too fast). The whole story reads like action with romance attached on to it rather than a clever mix of both (it does look like you want to lean more into action than romance but with the word count and all the romance has to appear more to provide backstory).
For the theme, it’s Luc, it could also be the bomb, it could also be that flashlight and the radiation. The darkness lies in the circumstances, which was made abundantly clear (multiple times) in the first scene. I love this idea cause it’s very unique, and can’t wait for the full release.
P.S is that doggo Theo cuz it’s giving Theo. Also we need 100 ratings NOW.
Rating: 4355
Edit: Rebalancing of rating to 4455