Spoiler Alert!
Quite a long story with an interesting premise to boot. However, there seemed to be a really clear split between the halves of the story (Right where The Hunter suddenly broke his leg specifically). That was a pretty dramatic tone shift, which would be fine if it’s an introduction to a longer story, but even that plot point is quickly and (imo quite anticlimactically) resolved.
The world you built was really interesting, and I especially love the fact that ‘The Forest’ could be considered an entity, sheltering for those poor souls. Would love to know more and deeper into the war also, but alas word count and time constraints held everything back.
Presentation wise, why is some of the bgs so dang bright. I get that the theme is ‘Light in the Dark’ but do you have to include a sun in those bgs, (also it kind of looks like the sun is overlayed on the trees instead of behind them, and Grams house definitely does not need another light source). The rest looks fine though, and I also love the music you picked.
There were some grammatical errors, mainly just the mixing of words.
(as a sidenote, idk if its just me but sometimes the game menu buttons act up. Like I was clicking the ‘Back’ button but it doesn’t let me click multiple times in a row and those button also seems to cut off from the top way more than it is from the bottom. It’s nothing too much, but I felt like I should point that out).
As for the theme, well the plot with the mushrooms and MC freeing them could count as ‘Light in the Dark’, and also the acceptance of their relationship from May.
P.S And my favorite character has no sprites :< (Connor my lil goober)
Rating: 4344