Spoiler Alert!
A short story that felt more like a scene in a bigger plot. It felt like we were dropped in the middle of an unfolding story, with no head or tails of what’s actually happening. Everything is vague, especially the threat and the cult, which would’ve been pretty important to build on to instead of just stating that they exist as is.
There seems to be an error every other sentence, which really affected my reading experience (It’s hard to take things seriously if I have to recorrect myself twice every time I read).
Idk if it was mentioned but I don’t even know why Nigel was captured in the first place?
For the presentation, the bgs are ok, there seem to be no music and the placement of our MC’s phone (in the corner right above the textbox) felt a bit too far and also looks off when it is displayed.
The theme is well, literally the escape. And also the MC being a firefly. On the nose, and that’s a good thing.
P.S Literally editing this right now to add a P.S section because I forgor. Why does MC have so much difficulty activating his light? (it felt like he was constipated lol)
Rating: 4123