But I’d love the writing to be less…blunt I guess.
Yeah this is where being non-native strikes >.< To write in english costs me extra time, I did a LOT of back and forth to the dictionnary to look for the most natural choice of words. I also cared a lot about picking words that fits the atmosphere and convey the feelings I wanted. I prefered that to write a lot but with worse english. I rushed in the end also. ^^"
the theme is there yes, but it doesn’t feel like it’s something present throughout the journey
Ok I see and understand. The feeling more than the world frame... It's true that without the battle system there is much more butt than moon in the middle part... Though it's short and sandwiched between the intro and the end scene with a life-saving light while you faint.
Maybe I failed to immerse you in the atmosphere too. Or maybe we all have a different interpretation of what a theme means.
Thanks for you comment nonetheless, and sorry for being wordy, I am hungry for comments and curious. ^^
Big bad wolf gonna whimper in no time if I get my hands on him
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