Well, this is simply a CHARMING game. I see a lot of potential here for an elaborate narrative format which is at once mystifying and familiar to the casual Roleplaying Gamer. The style is reminiscent of Burton and Gaiman, and it leaves just enough to the Imagination to feel immersive. My only recommendation would be to incorporate music. I can refer you to a number of independent composers, myself included, to that end. There are sound designers who will resonate with a story like this and who can supplement atmosphere. At any rate: you clearly have both Vision and Sensibility. I am looking forward to seeing your contribution to Dream Jam!!
[({L.J.)}]