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I asked Raykyu to translate this VN to me because I felt like it deserved to be read, but being Polish was heavily penalizing it, thankfully I had the perfect guy for the job! Be kind to me, this reading experience has been basically a game of telephone so my review might not be as accurate as it should be. It's a combination of hearing it from Raykyu and my own gut feeling.

So... I'd say try to go easier on the words you want to use, it gave me the impression to be very flowery and very descriptive, sometimes there are metaphors that provide unnecessary information you could've easily skipped.

I liked the atmosphere and imagery you were going for, even through Raykyu's vague description I could easily picture what was happening and follow the story just fine. I would've liked to learn more, but you go VEEEERY easy on the sharing world-building department and that's a shame. Also terminology was a bit too on the nose, but thats me nitpicking. 

Art is amazing, sprites (almost all of them. The MC looks a bit jarring. That evil sprite doesn't work at all with the vibe), music; everything blends together nicely. Really enjoyable even if I would've liked to see the plot progress more. It's a bit on the slow side.

I'm guessing this is a WIP and you're planning to write more? Cause the ending isn't as satisfying, especially the death one. It gives you nothing. And the other one feels a bit abrupt on the LETS MAKE OUT NOW. Imo there wasn't enough build-up and bonding to make that part feel justified. BUUUT the bath scene was very nice and tasteful. It just needed more bonding time before the uwu part, that's all. Goob job on writing this one!

3/3/5/5

(+1)

Yes, I guess now it's a WIP because I'm also not really fond of the endings. I had planned much more that was supposed to happen in the city so the (let's call it "good") ending wouldn't seem so out of place, but as the English translation tends to have more words and I didn't want to hit the 25k limit (which I guess I could have avoided by shortening the cryptic descriptions I love to abuse). I'm actually not sure if in the updated version there will be two endings. I have mixed feelings about the whole situation that happens in the temple so I guess I need to rethink this whole part.

 The MC is going to be fixed in July because, yes, he looks too mad.

 Thank you so much for your feedback!