After a quickstart with a lot ( A LOT) of zooms on your girlfriend's ass. Without any sense of transition nor momentum, you reach the apex of the absence of narrative structure : a black man surfing with an erection. That's killed me. If you want send me money for my tomb, I have no paypal, anyway my soul was crushed by this experience.
Author, when you have no NTR' experiences in your life, it's ok, and wealthy I mean, but don't try to mimic, it simply doesn't work.