You have no idea how long I’ve been hungering for something like this. It was a deeply emotional read for me, in large part because I was reliving similar personal experiences and projecting myself (and a former friend) onto Zane and Jake as the story unfolded, which amplified emotions tenfold x) Only wish it was longer, or there was a bit more satisfying conclusion since the story felt like it stopped, rather than ended - I can only presume you had time/word constraints to meet.
As for more general remarks, I found the lack of sounds/music very noticeable in some parts and the extreme technical details and American-specific terms occasionally made me stop in my tracks, but that’s more of a ESL me thing. On the other hand, I really liked the sprites and the creative use of transitions in select scenes.
Very excited for what you’ll release next!