📝 Proofreading & Style Feedback
Your writing already carries the introspective, sensory tone that works really well in IF. I just have a few light polish suggestions to enhance flow and cohesion. The issues are both in the opening sequence
- “You decided to spend this short time…” → should be: “You decide to spend this short time…”
- “Thanks to them, for a few days, you’re off work.” Consider replacing “them” with “the holidays” for clarity. It reads more naturally and avoids potential ambiguity in a nonlinear or branching context.