What I liked!
- "You bipeds are shit" had me cackling for a full evening. Doris is a really fun villain!
- Pixel art map + general art style is really well done!
What could use improvement:
- A pass for grammar and consistency.
- Encounter mechanics for the monsters are a bit vague.
- The background lore takes up a lot of space but is not immediately relevant to the scenario. It informs the villain's motives and gets the PCs into position, but they'll still be spending most of their time being hunted by Doris. Could be compacted to some important highlight and more space could be given to other elements.
I like the direction though and would love to see Doris go on a rampage across the stars. I'm happy to chat more about my thoughts in DMs if you'd like!