Hello, here are some notes I took while reading!
This looks GORGEOUS. Never mind the jam, this is imo one of the best looking trifolds period. layout, design, art all fantastic
Love scenarios that treat PCs as more than fodder--their history, families, etc. and appreciate how you've integrated it so naturally into your theme.
Having now read it twice through maybe my only critique is that it feels like a lot of parts to keep track of. But that's mostly an indictment of my ability to warden a game. Really I'm just looking for anything to give constructive criticism on because this is so good, polished, interesting... there's not a lot to nitpick. This is a triumph, truly. wonderful work!