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I love the aesthetic, both the character portraits and map design give atmosphere and I am a sucker for retro/analog aesthetics for horror. A TALKING DOLPHIN? such a fun idea and reminds me of Johnny Mnemonic which is always a plus. There are some grammatical errors throughout and could use a quick editing polish. I was confused by the exact size of the crew as I assumed at first it was only the four NPCs on the ship but then on the room key it talks about extra crew. Not every character needs a portrait (I do think one of the alien ambassador would be really cool though) but it might help to list out the full crew even if its just a list of names and roles. I feel as if the NPCs could be fleshed out more, outside of the dolphin most of them don't give me much. Lots of really great ideas for blending of alien cultures, animal rights, and preserving/pillaging nature and I'm a sucker for anything set in a submarine. I feel like you could take the ideas further and elaborate on some of the bigger theme ideas, what's the morals of the crew? do they all think of Doris as a pet? You could use their relationship with Doris to indict what they think of nature and maybe what they would do with the talking pearl. Overall, there are the bones and threads of something really intriguing and I am interesting in bringing A TALKING DOLPHIN?!?!?! to my table. I do think I would have to do some prep work and further some of the ideas and threads you have here but overall vibes, aesthetic, and themes are headed in the right direction. I would like some alien and sea monster art as it'll look so great in the aesthetic that you crafted. I think you can get weird with some of the ideas as the central premise is a talking dolphin so some crazy sea monsters would feel at home.


Side note I am not sure if it was just a problem with my computer and how I displayed the file after downloading it but the text was unreadable when a page would fit on the screen and I would have to zoom in to be able to read. Again I am not sure if its my end or something with the file but at least something to look into.

Thank you for such a curated comment. Glad you like the vibe :D I wasn't sure the talkin murder ecoterrorist dolphin would work. 

Could you point the grammar problems to me in a DM please? English is not my first language so I probably wouldn't notice them even if I try.  I should had tested the module tbh (I just wrote it) and that would have made me notice that indeed I should give more info of the whole crew/ship , the alien ambassador, etc.  PDFs are weird, in my phone it zooms perfect, in my computer sometimes the lettering  goes very bold and the portraits blur :/ I'm thinking of printing it after the jam _and scan it_ so it looks pixel perfect (and analogic!).


Thanks again for taking time in such a detailed comment and reading the module :)

Btw sick screen name, love it

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yes I’ll comb over it and point out what spots I notice for grammar. Just give me some time and I’ll send it over. Scanning a printed version of it is so analog that’s real fun. I got the screen name from a punk song haha it’s called Operation pt. 2 by the uranium club I just always thought the line was so funny 

Thanks mate :)