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First of all, I wish the creator/developer all the best in regards to their health, as I can empathize. Keep battling & best of luck!

I really like this AVN and am sad to learn there's little hope it gets finished, especially after a strong start with a potentially interesting hook/twist.

The following section isn't meant to dump on this AVN, it's constructive criticism. The section is longer because I'm passionate about this projects untapped potential, given the creator's talent & ability to write banter.

My only constructive criticism/observation is, excessive & inefficient dialogue (scene bloat).

Summarized: Random, charming & quippy  tangents morph into long, drawn out & pointless conversations stuffed with Marvel quipps that triple-down on themselves, often killing the scene & story momentum.

Over time, the story becomes weighed down by the aforementioned inefficient dialogue (which feels more self-indulgent than disorganized), inadvertently creating a less engaging & more exhaustive experience.

It isn't as bad as it sounds, it's just unfortunate, as the quipps are decent & all the other aspects of this AVN are solid.

Had the writing been more focused/efficient, the same effort would've likely progressed the plot further, providing more charming & quippy content.

I'll definitely follow this developer regardless, and hope their health improves regardless of if they choose to continue this project. But here's to hoping. Cheers!