Hi! I liked that you made this an emotional story, but want to offer some feedback so you can improve it.
- There are several inconsistencies with the AI Artwork. I know this is common, but it demands attention.
- Try to make use of the NVL mode of RenPy for longer bits of exposition or narration. You can make the NVL textbox customized like the rest of the game, so it won't interfere so much with seeing the background.
- Consider finding a nice font. Default font makes me sad.