AFDSFDAFDSA the writing and premise are so deliciously written omg this is genuinely one of the most beautiful IF stories i've ever read as a long-time fan of the genre 😭🙏🏼 the interactions with umr had me *giggling*--you really did a wonderful job of making such a detailed character with so many different layers of his personality. i found myself conflicted on whether or not i should hate or trust // submit to or defy him, and i found that inner struggle incredibly enjoyable! it was really as if he was a living, breathing person instead of just a written character, someone i am curious in figuring out in later chapters.
one thing i will say though, is that some choices didn't really convey the emotion i was expecting from the wording. i can't name any specific examples but i remember picking one or two dialogue options and being like 'oh, my character's smirking. it was supposed to be said sarcastically??' but maybe that's just me and it was such a little part of my experience and didn't detract from the quality of the writing in any way.
so, so excited for more of this project and to read your later works in the future! much love 😊💖