Okay, so I played it.
World is interesting, if a bit sparse on details, but that's to be accepted with the MC of the story. A history class/lesson would be a good way of filling in some blanks in a natural way that doesn't feel to obvious to the player. You've also got characters like Willow's mom (assuming the player meets them) that can bring it up in conversation. So good planning on that (if it's planned, that is.)
There's some minor spelling mistakes here and there, stuff like a dropped 'e' in 'honest', and a few dropped 'to's.
The punctuation is a bit messy. Some of that can be explained by the MC being a senior college freshman, but even the narration does it at times. When reading some of the scenes they kinda came up like a big blurb because I expected to see commas and full stops and just got words instead. It probably depends on the reader more than anything, but it's something I noted.
The only other note I have is Willow. Writing-wise, she's a great character, definitely did a good job with her (though it would be cool if the MC had another scene spotting her beyond the auditorium beyond the meeting on the walk home.
The thing is: Her VN sprite and her portrait clash in appearance. Her VN sprite makes her look like an anthro furry girl, while her Portrait makes her look like a Naa'vi. So you get a clash between the 80-90% Furry and the 10-15% "not a furry" girl both staring at the player.
Now, this is going to be very YMMV depending on who you ask, but I personally LOVE her VN Sprite look, but there's people who are going to be the opposite. See what I mean about clashing?
The answer you get is, again, going to differ. To me the answer is a simple "Oh, well she should resemble her more furry-appearance in both!" but for all I know, that wasn't your intended goal with her, and she's actually supposed to resemble her portrait more than her VN Sprite. Now, I'd be fine with that decision, but I can't lie and say I would be in favor of that.
So overall, interesting premise, some spelling issues, cute character. Nice VN!
