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Now that I played Olivine Lights, I can appreciate just how great this game is. A lot of love went into the whole affair, and it really shows. You're very skilled at telling a kinetic story. It's impressive. 

Critique now. I think the dialogue comes across a little bit like the MC bouncing ideas off himself at times because everyone is a little snarky. Marnie's personal troubles are where her writing is at its best. 

I also wish more of the map adhered to Kalos. I loved Prism Tower and Lumiose Station. It didn't seem quite necessary to drop the Louvre and Les Invalides in, especially when they weren't poke-fied. Something about XY's plot could've improved it.

I look forward to playing the next one.

All of these are valid criticism, and most of them I've heard in some form once or twice before. I'll keep them in mind when writing the next thing. Thanks for your feedback! I can't improve as a writer without lovely people like you pointing out where the flaws are. I hope you enjoy what I make in the future as well.