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Hi! Thanks a lot for taking the time to send those screenshots and giving your feedback, it means a lot <3 I'll make sure to go through the screenshots soon and correct the mistakes there. Sorry in advance for the super long text; I wanted to explain thoroughly and properly!

As for the confusion you mentioned in chapter 1 - I understand where you're coming from. There might be instances where the transition isn't smooth enough because I actually wrote chapter 1 before writing any of the content present in prologue part I and II. That being said, I'm also deliberately keeping a lot of things vague since I want to reveal things bit by bit and letting you get used to the world instead of exposition dump an explanation for everything right away. 

Although you get to play a bit of the MC's childhood, there's a 19 year time skip where the reader isn't really informed of what the MC has experienced during their time with Cirern and I want to delve into that bit by bit rather than all at once :) but I'm going to go over that part again! It's really helpful to know what is and isn't clear to readers since I already have all the information and it's difficult for me to determine that while proofreading. So thank you for that!

Can I ask you to specify what you meant by 'curse'? If you mean the part where the MC can't talk about certain things with Fri regarding their past, that's specified during the "Contract" part of the prologue if you say yes to knowing the terms of the contract. 

And about the awkward transitions, that's a bug; there are quite a few variables involving the garm and Fri, and what Muir says differs, but the text where it says that he speaks and then doesn't say anything is a bug. I thought I had it fixed but I must have missed a variable there. Will look into that too!

Thank you so much for your feedback, I'm going to take it with me when I go back to editing chapter 1! And sorry again for the extremely long answer lmao ;;