Hello ! Hope you are well ! The idea of the story is nice with quite a few links that we can find in our own world. I think using fantasy to discuss these topics is a wonderful idea.
I donât know what kind of feedback to give since itâs still in progress, so maybe what Iâm saying are things already planned!
For the intro, I would have added a few visuals, even simple ones, to present the universe, the Shepherdâs fortress, for example, a map of the empire, etc.
The music is well-chosen to present the concept, I think.
The idea of the flowchart is good, I hope youâll keep it for the rest of the game.
For the raven character, I would have added some onomatopoeia to characterize him more.
Good luck with the rest of the development!