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Finally finished the entirety of the game! I must say, it's been a while since I played a long visual novel. I think the last one was 2 years ago. Anyway, I immensely enjoyed the game and the story. Something I have to commend is how you handled the Antagonist's story and character. I like how when you're not during his route, he doesn't suddenly gain redemption at the end of the game. To the bitter end, he is still set on his hatred, pain, and rage. And that is so refreshing to see. All too often, antagonists are lectured by the main characters and suddenly have a redemption moment. Even though it makes no sense for them to get enlightenment from a group of people they do not know. So I liked how the antagonist stayed true to his goals and hatred. Yes, he faltered a bit after the LI speech but that didn't stop him from still saying he won't forgive those who hurt him, hence why he met his end. So bravo on that. Because you wrote him in such a way during the 3 main LI's route, when I got to his route, it hit me so much harder. Because now I could see and hear how agonizing his pain was. Now I could see where his hatred stemmed from and it made me want to help him forgive himself even more. I wouldn't have felt so deeply for his redemption if it was achieved in the main LI's story because it would feel cheap at that point. Like I'd wonder, "So you went through all that just to let 4 people who weren't there change your mind?" I wished we'd seen his epilogue, after he atoned but I guess it's more realistic since he would have a long way to go.

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 One thing that frustrated me about the game was the characterization of Maya. When we first met her, we're told about how she didn't complete high school and started working as a pole dancer at the young age of 15. Now I'm unsure if it's a culture thing or something else, but I expected Maya to be mature, responsible, and have sound judgment. I mean, she's 19, yes but she's been in the working world for 4 years, and even more so working in the adult entertainment world. I expected her to be a bit more sensible, but she wasn't? And what really told me she wasn't was when she trusted Kaiden and Gale like immediately upon meeting them. During the whole Harpy segment, I was confused on why she trusted Kaiden and strove to see the good in him so much? I almost thought I chose the wrong choice, but I deliberately chose the choices that said not to trust them, but she still did and I was like huh? During the scene in the Spring Village where she said she felt betrayed, I was so confused because...we don't know them? We spent 1 month with them and barely talked so why is she feeling betrayed? And there were times where Maya was naive and idealistic and then the story would continuously push the fact that she's an "adult" but never once did she show characteristics of one? Again, I don't know if this is a cultural thing but she did not come across as an adult rather a 16-year-old. Never mind the fact that she came wholly unprepared for the journey despite getting time to prepare from the Goddess. She didn't pack matches, or cooking utensils, or anything worthwhile but she made sure to pack coffee, and chocolate. If it wasn't for Gunther, Arya, and Khalil, she would have died a month into the story. Which was proven when she packed better in the ??? route. To be very honest, she is my least liked character simply because I couldn't tell if she was supposed to be the bubbly 19 year old who acted her age or was she supposed to be a 19 year who had to grow up quickly due to her circumstances? 

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Hi, redkitty120! Congrats on finishing the game & thank you for sparing your time to write this review ^.^)/
First of all, Kaiden's route was a challenge to write. I had forgotten how many times I revised it--my proofreader is probably a saint for having put up with me haha. Nevertheless it's one of my proudest moment when I finished writing his story so I'm really happy and flattered to hear you love it^///^ 

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As for Maya, I understand too well about your frustration x'D
There are a couple of reasons why she's like that:
- First off, education & living circumstances. She is naive & too-trusting to a fault. Hence, she got very depressed when her friends turned on her until her hair fell off & she cut her hair short. 

She should've learned from past experience to be more wary of people, but even so, she still try and see the best in them(thanks to her family & her work place. The pole dancers are often underestimated & disdained by society but to Maya, they're people like her who are just trying to get by. They helped her to trust once more in humanity.)

As for her packing items, she never went too far from home/overseas & with her low education... she just went and packed whatever popped in her mind like a nervous child :'D If I remember correctly, she did bring matches but later it got wet in the river scene? 

I understand where you're coming from though. She is a late bloomer. Maya's journey to maturity still has quite a long way to go, but she does understand her flaws and in her way, is working hard (though sometimes, she can't help the way she is, being a habit/just too stubborn to do otherwise like all growing child lol). 

Oh and fun fact; the hint for her immature characterization is that neon pink jacket she's wearing. She wears it because Sarah bought it for her & it's comfortable--but most adults will probably too embarassed to wear it in public 😂

- The other reason is... I don't know how to explain this. But you know that a lot of the stereotype Heroine is like Maya? Very trusting, hardworking, too nice, Mary Sue-ish, etc... I was inputting some of the stereotype character into her & it was my attempt to show people that not all villain will suddenly turn 'good'/be reasoned with when they meet the 'right heroine' like in animes 😂 and you catch it! It's also my attempt for a subtle 'friends to lovers/friends'

I hope I answered your questions!
xoxo,

SweetChiel

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I do think Kaiden's story felt the strongest because it was realistic. From his friends who did betray him but ultimately wanted to save him, to his holding hope for them to save him eventually, to him losing his sanity after witnessing Gale's demise (Kaiden is my Crash Out King). Kaiden suffered so much in such a deep way so his rage was more profound. And sorry but I still hate the king. I will never forgive him regardless of his reasoning. Because what do you mean you were going to release him a year after torture!? You really thought he'd be alive afterwards and you could atone for this mistake?  Even if Kaiden hadn't lost his mind and crashed out, the king would have lost his kingdom because let's be honest, he sucks. While I understand Maya's character a bit more, I still think I like Tamara a bit better.  Which is why I will be replaying her story because I miss her. Never the less, congrats on creating such a magnificent story and I look forward to the next project. 


P.S. When we first met Kaiden I stated, per verbatim, "Kaiden has to be the villain and if he is, he would be my favorite character." Because Maya trusted in him so much, I was rooting for him to be the villain. And he was revealed to be, I cheered. 

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I'm smiling this morning after reading your comment so thanks again, redkitty120! ^///^ 

I agree, the King is quite... incompetent. Especially when it comes to managing his prime minister and the Nobles. I created him while thinking about the Kings who held short reigns over their thrones so yes, I also don't like him >_<;

And no problem at all! I'm just glad you're enjoying the story. When Bermuda first completed I kept questioning myself whether it's good or not so hearing many thoughts/opinions is very good for me so I can improve as a writer <3

Not to mention, people are still playing/re-playing Winged Ones so I feel very fortunate ~

The next project, Saving Grace, is going to take a loong time to develop since I have office work now 😞 but one step at a time like always and I'm sure we'll be there! I just hope you have the patience to bear with my snail-like-pace 😅