First of all, love the Edwardian hypnosis. I am a massive, massive fan and I wish it appeared more in your other games, but I understand it's hard to get that kind of thing across with only 'scenes', you need a dedicated storyline to break down someone's mental barriers using that tactic and word association
Speaking of, i love it.
I mean really~ loved it, I was hanging on to the narator's words. Also, FABULOUS storyboarding. The backgrounds just happen to be sunset bathed GOLD and ORANGE ...ahh, classic, hinting that this is all just an illusion, or a hypnosis induced recall state, put together by a CERTAIN cat~
My goodness, I could gush, the writing is fantastic. It's a little bit sad that the story is- as most mind washing stories are- railroading your choices to be meaningless. But that's okay. I like it. In fact, I find it endearing that you made the story address this, IN THE NARRATION that certain key elements to an otherwise very normal fantasy story opening would be glossed over, and thus help the reader dismiss these illusions of choice~
I am...Not, a pawslut...shocking, I know~ but the scene itself did not feel bad or like a pain to get through since you layered it with more of that Edwardian hypnosis, (My goodness I hope I'm referencing the right guy) with the word association and the color usage helping inform the reader of how their perceptions change and the notes about breathing and adjusting thoughts~
Wonderful work Cit~ simply fabulous!~ Hope to see more where the protagonist is turned into a submissive toy <3 <3