I LOVE the way that the narrative and rules alternate on the page. That gives the entire experience this poetic, dark vibe.
I don't know if it was intended, but the "dug too deep" and "awoke flame and shadow" feels like Lord of the Rings, where the dwarves dug too deep. That isn't a negative thing, I think you did an amazing job of capturing that (intentionally or not) and making it sing on your own.
I also love the hopeless nature of this. There isn't even a chance to roll a six five times or something, so you can live. But you still honor one another nonetheless, and there are still epic deaths to describe.
- ✨Beth