(reminder: this is meant to be constructive criticism. I'm saying all this because I'm looking forward to the full game)
things happened too fast, it didn't allow me to grow fonder of the characters, so I think the pace should slow down a little.
hinata's inability to guess what truly happened to ms. shiraishi right off the bat is strange considering he's a demon who feeds on fear, this should be ovious to him because he's supposedly a very evil entity. a human's doings should be child's play for him, I think.
kousuke's reactions at the hospital and at the bar are good, but his reactions at his house right after felt a bit contradictory seeing he was reluctant to go out with hinata at first. I get it that he's clingy and needy but it all happened too fast to be convincing. like dude's a literal stranger you know.
anyway the game's mood is great, dark BL is great, the art is great, hinata wanting to find him a hunting dog is a novel concept and I see a lot of potential in this VN but I just wish its pace would slow down a little more to let it all sink in. it feels a bit rushed.