While the artwork is truly horrendous, and the game-play (that is to say; the web browser only option) is pretty bad, I am VERY happy to find this game.... mainly because there just isn't enough scene kid games out there.
....or ANY scene kid games out there. lol
(And I mean the actually artwork, the skills with which it is drawn. The character creation is brilliant, and very cute.)
And the writing itself is surprisingly good.
(Spelling aside --I realize it's for flavor, but it works best for chat and phone messages, not for writing the story.)
...I take back what I said about the writing.
It is NOT good.
....but somehow still strangely compelling.
The blunt honesty with a random stranger is also -really- weird and unnatural.
(The translation isn't strictly necessary either. It actually feels more in the way than anything. Even IF it makes reading easier.
My advice would be to balance out the accent a bit.
What did that book on writing say again....?
Don't try and write the full accent. Pick keywords, and only
use the accent for -those- words.
(Imagine if Hagrid used a full-blown accent. You'd never understand shit. But him using certain words make it -seem- like he has a full on accent, while still making him possible to understand. (In the HP books I mean.)
The glaring open honesty that sounds like something you'd only tell your therapist, lack of subtext, and sounding like a phone chat rather than a conversation may be the game's biggest problem.
(Although practicing the 'show, don't tell' writing technique certainly wouldn't hurt.)
(Although the coding does not help. -Please- change to Ren'Py or something. Don't they have a pre-created set-up that's easy to use and looks good?)
If this is a rough preview of a possible game that is still in creation, I think the finished game actually might be a really good game.
I don't know if the creator is a beginner or just sloppy, but the idea is actually a pretty good one.
...assuming it's polished and taken seriously.
(The creating of the game I mean, not the game itself. The game does appear to be a bit crackfic like.)
But I'd love to see a proper version of this game, with a longer story and better artwork.
And also: CHOICES.
(Although that does seem to improve over time.)
Kudos on the choice to destroy the world or not. ^_^
(I'm all for darker choices. lol
And sometimes you have to deal with annoying people, and you just have to get it out of your system.)
Regardless....
This game is a lot better than it should, by all logic, be.
So please keep working on it, and make it a really great game. ^_^
I actually enjoyed it a lot.