I have something to add aside from what I've said on stream - I feel like right now the writing is a bit too cliche. Maybe that is your intention, but most of the "plot twists" are kinda obvious - the fairy obviously is leading you into a trap, Strauss is obviously an evil vampire, scared woman obviously hides something/knows something. I dunno if you're planning to subvert those tropes later down the line, but if not - it may become boring story-wise.