Hey, that was an interesting art style you had in your game. It appeared as if there were some actual images but they were obfuscated, which I've not seen done yet. I loved the feather for hair touch on the exorcist! The music was calming and appeared to fit the setting.
A big pointer I would have is that there was a lot of text thrown at the reader at one time. Personally I would have loved to see more conversational type text either from the narrator or between characters. It makes it much easier to immerse in the world you have built.
Great job on the submission!