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Thanks for your reply! Yes, it's easier to write exciting stories for fantastical settings, but that doesn't seem to be the problem here. I just think that many conversations get boring after a while. They are either too long or not interesting enough.

I'm not a writer but let me give you some potentially irresponsible advice: I dare you to reduce all dialogues with Crystal and the MC's friend to half the length. Just focus on what's most important and see what happens.

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Came here to say the same thing. The conversations between the MC and some of the other characters are way too long and not gripping enough, especially with the MC's friend and Crystal. It could use a bit of trimming, imho.