You did a great job with the story, it definitely makes me want to know more.
As a fellow person who uses the RPG Maker engine there are some technical aspects you can easily fix. I will spend those to you directly .
https://discord.gg/d8T7Dc if you have discord open you can join the channel by clicking this link.
Alternatively, you can add me by typing my ID in the search box in the top right corner JBO#1596
And im going to play it now, if, you add me on discord we can discuss.