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Hey! I'm playing through this right now and am really enjoying it. I've actually wanted a monster themed yuri game for some time, so I really appreciate this.

I saw you mention that some character routes were unfinished and the choices were really strict because they are supposed to be played last. If you don't mind answering, what is the intended order to play through the routes?

I've also noticed a lot of grammatical and spelling related errors. I mean no offense, but it can often make reading through the dialogue a bit confusing at times. I understand this is still a work in progress, but if you need someone to help write dialogue in a more cohesive way, I'd be willing to help if that's possible.

I think this could turn out to be a really good read once it's more fleshed out and finished. Also, I don't know if this is intentional because it's a monster themed game, but I keep seeing "Witch" instead of "which", Witch bugs me sometimes lmao.

It also says it's been updated to 2.0, but when I download it I still get the 1.0 version. Not sure what's going on with that, maybe I'm just downloading it too early and I need to give time for the file to upload?

llonelly4 years ago (2 edits)

the intended way is Lyell, bae, vic, xanthes and liens. the first three don't matter as much but might be confusing in certain parts , but liens must be last . this is also due to the violence and horror aspects increasing in each route so it eases you in.

And yes I'm very bad at English in general such as spelling and grammar. my brain just doesn't see the mistakes like others do so it makes it hard to proof read for me. it takes me a couple rereads of a line before I even notice a mistake. I'm much better at general comics with little dialogue but I wanted to branch out and learn.So yes, your help would be very appreciated(And I'll credit you for helping and such if you want). And I hate witch and which so much cause I do mess them up a lot :'). but thank you for the feedback! and I'm really glad you're enjoying it! sorry for my grammar mistakes.

Also renpy when compiling the game defaults the version to 1.0 no matter how many times you built it before. But on itch if the file name is different it doesn't replace the old ones. And if you delete the old files instead of replacing then they lose the stats that are on them. So you have the newest verison its just the file name that is the same. Its weird and i don't like it :'). Unless your not seeing the changes I mentioned in the description?

Kazito4 years ago (2 edits) (+1)

No problem! I figured English may not have been your first language, and that's totally cool. I'm well versed in English and I'd love to help in any way if I can, so just let me know what I can do for you and how I can get in contact with you outside this comment section. I wanna see this succeed! Don't worry about your mistakes, they will only help you to improve.

llonelly4 years ago

I saw it don't worry. And English is my first language I'm just really bad at it, grammar and spelling just never stuck with me like other people sadly(every semi colon you see in the game is just a wild guess as if its right or not.) I have two tumblrs(One in the description of game and the one on my creator page), a twitter and a discord . just tell which one you prefer.

Kazito4 years ago(+1)

That's cool too :) I struggled with it as well a bit but I'm pretty good on that front now. I thought when you said you were bad at English it was because it wasn't your first language, my mistake.

Anyways, Twitter works for me since I don't really use discord a lot.

llonelly4 years ago(+1)

thats cool no worries. my twitter is @llonelly2 just message whenever :)

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