I can see the pattern, just got through the Maria introduction - and ran into the first inconsistency, I think. On the first free-roam, I had the chance to go hang out with Selen, then talk to Millie, then run away from Rosemi. That leads into the backrooms scene, and in the ensuing events MC makes references to Asmodeus and The Root, which I just wrote off as references fans in the know would get. But then in the Maria introduction scene, she mentions both and kinda introduces them to MC, which leads me to think that the logical order the scenes should show in is "Maria introduction that introduces the concepts" ---> "Backdoor scene that recalls them". Did you write them in that order and then shuffled them around perhaps? Or was it a bit of an oversight that the player can get one scene without having seen the other?
(Also, another typo: “I came across Petra napping on the grass by the street out by the street…”)