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Well, I have good news for you. I'm working on the sequel right now. It will be triple the length of the original Ninisanni Scenario by my estimation, all new content. More freeform too, so you can spend time with whoever you wish.
Also, at this time I can confirm the girls past Ethyria will be in the sequel. If you like Maria, you're especially in for a treat.
This one hit kind of hard. Like the other commenters, I feel this was meant explicitly for me.
Living like Ayumu, there's times I want a Nagi.
But at the same time, I think Nagiko is better for me. She keeps me hungry. I can cook for myself.
In terms of a review:
-Music perfectly fits the atmosphere.
-UI is impressive, but there's some slight disconnect with the rasterization of certain elements. I can't decide if I care enough about it to mark it down as a negative.
-Spritework is okay. Nagi's design is good enough, though it's hard to take her seriously with those pom pom earrings.
-Backgrounds are okay. Once again, there's a certain disconnect between it, the UI, and the sprites. I think it's about the saturation. I understand Nagi is meant to be brighter and more colorful than the BGs, but the UI textbox is so blaring, some of the effect is lost. That's not to say the UI textbox isn't beautiful.
-Writing is above average, but I still prefer other ebi-hime works more. I think it has to do with the setting. Not much you can do in a plot like this.
-Unease as a mechanic works and fits the game.
Extremely short, to the point where you might as well not play it at all. 8 minutes, maybe? When the credits rolled around, I was expecting to only have played the intro.
Deceivingly high production value, voice acting,and design, only for it to flounder out so quickly.
The only positive I can state is that pulling the camera control away to focus on an object while walking is a much better gameplay element than using a cutscene.
From a narrative perspective (because that's likely what the producers will use to justify the lack of content) Luggage is vague and cowardly. We don't know why Steve iced Gale. We don't much care, to be honest. The girlfriend line gets thrown away. The foreboding implication of luggage just turns out to be a metaphor emotional baggage, which I physically cannot about, because none of Steve and Gale's relationship or conflict has been built at all.
I'm really hoping somebody tells me it's one of those fakeout endings and you're meant to start the game again to continue the story.
Surprisingly great fangame.
Reminds of the flash era. I wouldn't be surprised if you were a dev then, given the stickmen sprite for Millie.
Guns were fun. Handgun was probably the best due to damage and range, but I liked using the minigun instead because the slippage sometimes go around the corners of the platforms.
Metroid style maps works. I was surprised to find the map was randomly generated, but that was a much appreciate feature.
The challenge of the game comes with range. You lose range when moving, and you have to move to dodge attacks. A lot of attacks go through walls, but most of them don't fade out like your bullets do.
Because of this, I felt the beam was one of the best powerups, because it let you deal with very inconvenient enemies through walls.
That said, you bullets do hit enemies offscreen, which is much appreciated, simply because it feels fair, and proves that Journey of Calamity doesn't play by the same "restrictions" as most flash games.
One very solid mechanic I'd like to highlight is the graze. For those uninitiated, graze refers to when a bullet just nearly misses you. Unlike Touhou's graze, which just provides points that can later be redeemed for an extra life, Journey of Calamity's graze adds to your special meter, allowing you to use powers like nuke, shield, invicibility, attack up, etc. That creates more of an instantaneous gratification than touhou imo.
God Sees All music was great. I didn't tire of it, despite how many times I reset.
Is it just me, or does Millie speed up when not in combat? Good "Quality Of Life" Feature.
Pixel art and general art were kawaii. I appreciate how expressive they get. Dull-eyed Enna... eroi...
In conclusion, should you play this game if you don't know what a vtuber is and don't care about Millie? Yes. The gameplay is certainly enough to sustain it.
Excellent game.
I am a fan of singleplayer card games, and this one certainly fills the heart shaped hole Inscryption left within me. It might help that I happen to like mushrooms.
Gameplay is sensible and lets you break the game. Major plus for card games. There are several different ways to exploit the mechanics and most of them work congruently.
Art is reasonable
Music is fine.
I love a good dungeon, and this game did it for me (with extra mushrooms). Would recommend to friends leery about Inscryption due to the length.
An excellent little game.
It's absolutely stunning that this was made within 72 hours.
Font, theme, and art aesthetic are all on point.
Sound effects are completely fitting.
Character models have their individual charm and provide indication on their preferred terrain.
The game provides a surprisingly challenging level of difficulty using RNG as a basis. You sometimes need to send your low level heroes on uncertain missions to raise their stars, and you have to choose within a limited pool of candidates, while planning ahead in regards to their natures and preferred terrains.
If there is one thing I would ask, it's for more quests to train lower level heroes stars. Towards the end, if you fail in a mission with your best heroes, it becomes a foregone conclusion that your low level stars aren't going to make it, and despite their being four days, there are no quests to increase their states.
I do love it though. It's charming, and reminds me of historical accounts of the Battle of Marathon.
I laughed at the therapist bit past the intro. Imagine waking up to somebody asking you how why you're such a terrible person. Instantly made me feel bad for the poor girl.
I really like nearly everything being examinable. Small details like that reward the player for being curious, and help make up for the weakness of pixel art with good prose.
This game is so pink. I like it though, it's the good kind of pink.
Art and UI seem to be at a bit of a fuzzy resolution, but I don't care because it reminds me of other RPGmaker games and feels homey.
Sound effects are really good, I really like the little piano notes. Brick, tile, grass, and pillows all have their unique footstep sounds. I really appreciate that small detail.
Music is comfy, not much to say. What you would expect.
I went in not expecting much from the demo, but I'm impressed. It's longer than I expected. I eagerly look forward to the full release.
What do I think of Laletta? I love her, of course!
Before I review, take into account this was made for a game jam in 72 hours. That's an insanely short amount of time to make a game, so props to you for making it in the first place.
That said, gameplay is terrible. Just fetch quests, all "go pick up ten of these". Did little to lure me into a sense of normality, it instead just sort of felt tedious.
Character designs are all generic and hard to tell apart but I like the way they speak with rising inflection.
I can forgive the 2.5D trees because I kinda like that aesthetic.
Textures are terrible, probably the worst part of the game.
I hate that something spooky is revealed on day 3, and there's nothing you can really do about it for the next couple days. Just felt kinda like 'oh, there it is'.
The ending was pretty hairraising though. Pretty neat. The darkness, the music change, both good choices. You went with a good final scare.
Overall, the limitations you had bump it up from waste of time to mid.
I think your problem comes with the premise. You spend a lot of time in the OG Animal Crossing constructing your own little world, so when something creepy does happen, it feels like a violation of your personal space on top of being scary. Here, you have little time to get acquainted, and even less involvement in the world.
Not much you could do for that, given the time you had, but I would have added a couple other trivial quests (dialogue, fishing, maybe tending to a garden), and more time to get acquainted with the villagers.
If you had any desire to, I think the wealth of comments above mine show there are a lot of people interested in you expanding on the concept.
Another excellent entry by ebi-hime. Sweetest Monster and Sweetest Monster: Refrain is probably her best work (out of the five or so I've read) and I have no hesitation in regularly recommending it to people, even those that don't read too much visual novels.
What separates this VN from the rest you see on the market, is ebi-hime's writing. She's a rare talent. Even I don't write as well. Her writing is surprisingly easy to take in and binge for how deep and emotional it gets.
You'd think one would get a little sick of a twenty minute monologue on how much a character hates themself and wants to die, but you don't. Pins and needles, only enhanced by the music.
Music is good. Piano focus is smart
The titular song 'Sweetest Monster' is my favorite. Something about the instruments used. It's a song I strongly associate with the mood of this VN.
Props to the team. Darksin and Ruderoo's art assets are really... paintinglike. The kind of painting that feels comfortable to stare at. The sort of colors and soft lines you remember the world being like when you were a kid.
Haofeng made the GUI assets clean, very professional.
MINOR SPOILERS from hereon out. If itch.io has a spoiler tag function, please let me know.
Let's get this out of the way first, Sally best girl. It's not even really close. It's not just how ubercute she is, part of it is her sheer understanding and reasonable worry.
That said, Bell had a point. I agree with her completely, and if I were in her place, I would operate exactly as she did.
The most hateable character is probably the main character, but you really can't hate him, given it's ebi-hime writing his internal dialogue. I swear, she could make Stalin seem down to earth.
That makes Lily the least relatable character, but her duty, honesty, and goodness is admirable. I'll be picking up Lily of the Valley next.
I'll be honest. I'm a little sad to see the story end. However, stories need conclusions. Forced drama to drag out the narrative ruins good premises, and I respect ebi-hime for not going that route.
ON EBI-HIME'S NOTES
Reading ebi-hime's notes, it's really interesting to me that it was partially inspired by Nekopara. I walked away from Nekopara with the same impression as ebi-hime. The dystopian, slavelike nature of the world irritated me.
How can you call it love when one side is shackled to the other by necessity? It reeks of otaku power fantasy. Virgin losers don't have enough game to pull catgirls naturally, so they resort to systematic enslavement? Makes the fuwa fuwa come off as creepy. It doesn't even lean into the creepiness like it could. Never saw the appeal.
I suppose that's a reversal there in Sweetest Monster: Refrain with Bell the catgirl being in control.
Another thing it does better than Nekopara is reflecting the nature of the cat. Cats are not dogs. Left to their own devices, they have a 5 miles radius in their day to day life. They like to roam, meet up with friends, get in fights, hunt, explore, do parkour, etc.
Whereas dogs like defending a central location and getting affection, cats are more whimsical and selfish. If you like catgirls, Bell feels like much more of a catgirl than most catgirls.
Honestly, there's so much of a power gap between Sweetest Monster and Nekopara, I don't even see the comparison.
ebi-hime made the correct decision with the setting being England. It's more unique, and was part of the draw of Sweetest Monster for me. I love seeing the cultural idiosyncrasies of her English settings. Gives me an impression of modern day English comedy/slice-of-life that's more than just the Inbetweeners and Fresh Meat.
On a final, more positive note, I'd like to praise ebi-hime once again. Most great OELVN writers drop one excellent work and then disappear off the map. ebi-hime keeps at it.
More than any other VN producer (Japanese or otherwise), she inspired me the most. OELVNs are often seen as lesser. Less effort, less professionalism, less of a market. ebi-hime proves that assumption wrong by taking her works seriously, and it's really, really, cool to see. If it were anybody else, we wouldn't get a Sweetest Monster: Refrain, but we did. Seeing her take her work seriously makes ME want to take my work seriously, and I can't stress enough how glad I am that I do, because VNs are fun to read and fun to create.
Looks like this is your first game. What's more, you completed it in two weeks. Good job!
I have some constructive criticisms, but you can thoroughly disregard them if you want, since two weeks is a hard limit to make a game, especially having never done it before.
The fact you finished it AT ALL in those two weeks is a testament to your tremendous game development and writing skill, so once again, props.
Review:
Text reads too slow, you should either add a setting to speed it up, or speed it up naturally.
Art is notably amateurish, but I don't care, it's charming enough. If anything, it's clean, which is a big plus.
There's zero reason to have music restart upon changing BGs if it's the same music.
Also, the five second loop is rather grating. At least go for thirty seconds or something. I'm listening to it while writing this review and going insane.
Personal gripe, but I hate trigger warnings for ostensibly cute games. I'd rather you scar some children for life, than spoil the surprise for myself.
Font is too generic. A lot of VNs care about accesible fonts, which yours likely is, but it doesn't fit the art style of your game.
UI is overall poor. Save menu is unreadable, put a background behind it. Rollback behind the textbox is insane.
If I were you, I'd theme all the UI in your blocklined artstyle. Would add charm.
I got the Good Ending my first run. The twist was nice, took me by surprise. Good concept.
I refuse to go through it again to see the bad ends. I couldn't do that to Strawberry and the Strawbunny...
I liked clicking the strawberry to exit the menu. People might rag on you for it, saying you should have used some accessible universal symbol like an X, but I disagree. Charm over accesibility, in my opinion. Strawberry everything!
btw, I really tried finding the song that played there, would you mind posting a link to it/a playlist with the Soudntrack?
It's in the jukebox. Just click on the song names. Not all of them will be unlocked though, you have to have certain achievements. The musicians themselves are mentioned in the credits. All songs are taken from NijiEN members music, a lot of them are their BGMs
In addition to that the characters felt real, with multiple character traits, not being based completely on a single little trait. No character acted completely out of line from what I expected (although i almost only watch clips form some the featured VTubers).
I have to give as much credit to the Nijigirls as I do to myself. They're all such strong personalities with their individual habits and quirks. With certain girls like Rosemi and Finana, you can basically copy-paste from how they normally speak, their voices are so distinct.
It's also nice to hear they were accurate. This was a big worry of mine and I spent countless hours watching streams from the girls I don't usually watch, so as to capture their vocal tics and the cadence of their banter.
I'm glad I did, because I originally wasn't going to include Ethyria at all, so as to limit the scope. But I was watching a Nina stream one day, and realized how incredibly talented and charismatic she is. From there on, there was no way I wasn't going to include them, even if that meant essentially doubling the writing time and asset production.
but the Sprites, that were there felt alive when animated. It also lead to the texts being more decriptive, and the player having to use a little bit of imagination without having to use too much.
Fufufu, this was my intention. Staging the characters and choreography took almost as much time as the rough draft, but once you get to see them move and speak, it's really magical.
I especially enjoyed the smutty scenes, because they were so well written.
This was my first time ever writing sex scenes, but I found that it wasn't uncomfortable at all. A big part of their success, I attribute to the natural intimacy and connection between the MC and the girls.
Speaking of which: would you be comfortable with me releasing some sort "Ultimate guide" for the "All LINEs" and "Seduce all nine girls" achievments, when I get there?
Someone already made one in this link. I can confirm it's accurate .
WARNING: MAJOR SPOILERS IN LINK
https://drive.google.com/file/d/1V1pVCAn6xjaJ9o59uQbLYETIHwMt5d0w/view?usp=drive...
WARNING: MAJOR SPOILERS IN LINK
What I'm trying to say is... this Game somehow awakened a special feeling in me, that I cannot really explain, but it's a good one!
That's really cool to hear. I tried my best to put heart and soul into it, so people could feel the way I feel. That it touched you and others in the same way that it touched me really means a lot.
Anyways, did this change my opinion about Visual Novels? A little, yes.
This is great to hear. VNs have so much potential as a medium. Some great stuff has been published, but there's so much room to grow, and when creators start taking their work seriously, they can create some truly amazing stuff.
And if you do, I would appreciate more Characters (looking at you, Mika)
I'm playing around with the idea of cameos in the sequel. I typically wouldn't consider it, but certain individuals fit so naturally within certain scenarios.
But did this intruduce me to someone who has great writing skills? Absolutely! Consider me a follower.
Look forward to my future releases then! I'm not stopping just yet, it's full steam ahead for me!
yeah overall i really enjoyed the game so just minor critiques and even then took me abit to think of some lol
Hey, then it means it was overall pretty solid. Still, no matter how minor, it's still good to take everything into account.
i hope some more people stream it
That would be the dream, wouldn't it? Let me say this here, anyone can stream Ninisanni Scenario without my consent, or any restrictions.
No way one of the NijiEN girls would be approved for it, but I hope some other streamers and their chats can find enjoyment.
definitely looking forward to whatever you make next
Please do. I'm not going to rest on my laurels, that much is certain.
Thanks again and have a nice night!
Thanks for giving it a try! I'm glad you enjoyed it. Looks like I'm going viral, woohoo!
but she isnt really the outside type she's said that she likes to just stay home and is a introvert
Not to rib on the girls any more than I already have, but the majority of them don't seem like the outdoor type lmao. I mean, they sit inside and play video games all day. But I can't throw stones in glass houses, I suppose, because I do the same thing.
In any case, in that scene the MC is a bit more experienced than she is in the outdoors, but she takes to it rather well, I feel. I wish the real Selen would give it a try. Who knows, she may just enjoy it!
been nice if there were some small choices in the endings
The choices are mainly meant for getting onto routes. But you're not wrong, in that they're a pretty fun way to steer the scene, even if no game aspects are involved. I like giving the players control. I'll take it into consideration for my next work.
2 GB
High quality BGs for panning and zooming. You (as well as anybody else) can find a compressed version here https://f95zone.to/threads/ninisanni-scenario-v1-0-dullachan.152210/#post-103507...
Edit: You know what, just for you I'm going to upload the compressed version to itch.io. No reason not to, I suppose.
Edit2: I'm reneging, as I now realize the compresser compressed it with persistent data still inside (activated flags and spoiler save states). What a goofball.
Selen route kills me because I just cannot find the trigger to finish it and get the ending
Did you get her LINE? Doing so nets you a fair amount of points toward her route, and elucidates what seduction techniques work well on her and what doesn't.
Since all the girls are different, they're not all captured the same. Still, plenty of hints are dropped throughout the VN as to how capture Selen.
scenario 2 one day
It's an idea that's cooking. I'm taking a couple months off for now, but I have plans in the works.
Oh my, thanks for all the praise! I'm pleased that you've notice and appreciated some things I've taken gentle care to include, it's always a sigh of relief.
>Would have been nice if the Luxiem guys had more than one and done cameos
To be honest, I don't feel comfortable writing them accurately, because I don't watch them all too often. I also think they're talented and special enough to deserve their own VN, made by people who are more familiar with their in-jokes and speech patterns.
>drink-strip quiz game no choices
It does stand out, particularly because the scene is long.
Choices were my intention initially, but my peabrain kept getting confused by the continuity of removed clothing and whose turn it was. Probably should have thrown some small choices in though, if only to make those girl's routes a tad easier.
>common route
The routes are really strange in this VN. Only two girls have their "routes" affect proceeding through the common route (common route defined as everything before the corkboard). One of those two are only in because the scenes are vestigial, from a time when I wanted each girl to have to earn their route in the common route.
I changed this around once I realized I wasn't giving the girls enough screentime to work their way into your heart.
>stalker reveal
Others have complained about this too. I think what it comes down to is false advertising on my part. Stalker isn't exactly the right word. Yandere seems to cover it, but it's more of a character trait than a role/archetypal VN role... Matchmaker might work, but it's weird and has more positive connotations... Part of the difficulty is not being descriptive enough to spoil the minor reveal.
I am noting the demand for stalker Enna. I'm definitely taking it into account, nfufufu...
>same cast in a different context
This would be the most likely scenario. I am completely gassed on ideas for scenes for the school setting. If I do throw out a sequel, I'm gonna take the girls somewhere different. Maybe make them OLs. Maybe throw them into an isekai world. Maybe they all go on a roadtrip. I haven't decided, but I have some ideas...
Once again, thanks for giving it a try, and I'm happy you enjoyed it!
>really makes me want to create a VN
Definitely give it a shot! I love VNs a lot, and would love to play more. VNs are easier to make then you think. My recommendation is that you download Renpy to see if you like it. There are other tools for VN creation, but I don't see them offer many features that make them worth the switch.
Included within your download of Renpy are two games, Tutorial and The Question. Tutorial is a Renpy tutorial in VN format with a cute lady explaining how to go about using Renpy in a very easy to understand way. The Question is a sample VN that you can edit, replace assets and dialogue and such. The script files for The Question is intentionally laid out in a very clean format, so as to show you how a proper script should look.
For viewing .rpy files, I use Editra. For sound effects, I go to Zapsplat. For backgrounds, I go to Unsplash. Take those and some ripped sprites of your favorite chuubas off the internet, and just go at it! Oftentimes, if you have nice BG, it helps inspire the scene in your head.
Past that, it's all up to you. Creativity matters a lot, and it's cultivated over time. If you want my advice on how to REALLY make your VN stand out, I have three points.
1. Animation: Every line of dialogue from a character should have an expression change or movement. This will be time consuming, but the finished product is really movielike and choreographed. It's fun to do too, like being a stage director!
2. Sound Effects: I used way less sound effects than I should have. When used properly, they can add a lot of ambience. The hard part with sound effects is finding the perfect sound effect for your situation.
3. UI: To those who have played a lot of VNs, the default UI to Renpy is poison on the eyes. Definitely change up the images in the GUI folder, if you get the chance. Though since you're a beginner, you shouldn't worry much about this one, but it's definitely something to consider in the future when releasing a finished product. Adding image maps, jukeboxes, extras, are all fun little quality of life things that put a bit of extra soul into your project.
If you'll allow me to wax poetic for a moment, visual novels are a beautiful medium whose advantages haven't been fully captured yet, I feel. Their appeal lies more within a cinematic experience than the written word, and favors those who know their characters and can write snappy dialogue, but maybe flounder when it comes to scenic descriptions. It's closer to directing a movie than it is writing a book, so anticipate getting your hands dirty in writing, art, sound design, and coding. I don't mean to scare you off though, because it's all fun in very unique ways.
>in petra's ending was that an AoT reference or am I just misinterpreting it?
I felt bad killing the mood with that line, but I couldn't stop laughing every time I went over it in proofreading, and so I decided to leave it in.
>I do kinda wish some of the ending were a little fleshed out
As do I. If I were to do it again, I would've added more, more, more. Definitely add at least one more scene to offset the date -> epilogue resulting in back to back sex scenes.
Maybe I will, you never know. I had to pace this one weirdly because I wanted players to get a thorough introduction to the girls through a longer common route before they chose.
>deck the main character in the face
I tried to avoid the very Japanese trope of making the self-insert a wilting flower. And then when the results leaned too far in the other direction, making him a boisterous dummy, I just fanned the flames because it was funny. I think in the very first scene with the flashback is the most unforgivable for me. It's just so enraging.
>pomu's ending
I'll give you a hint. You get on it before the collab scenes. So the first day's choices matter the most, and after that it doesn't matter at all.