The art was great. The layout was effectively retro. The glitchy GUI toward the end was also fantastic.

Regarding the story, I felt like the horror scenes were wonderfully well-written. This was an interesting depiction of a yandere character.  As a multichapter fic writer, I can relate to the affirmation I get from comments and the abandonment I feel when regular commenters disappear without explanation. Correct us if we're wrong, but we must've gotten the true ending on the first try since we could no longer replay the VN. My teammate and I considered this an inventive gameplay mechanic. 

Overall, great job on your jam entry!

I enjoyed playing through this game. The beginning started off a bit slow, but I'm glad I stuck through it until the end. Are you a fan of games like Catherine or Persona? I felt a bit like I was being reminded of the themes from those games as I interested with Nagi and read through Ayumu's thoughts. 
When I was younger, I had quite a bit of depression that made it hard to produce anything and I read a lot of visual novels in that time. Your story very much reminded me of the type of visual novel I really enjoyed at that time. 
I don't know if this is the kind of story anyone could love, but I really liked it. It feels genuine and filled with lively writing that seems real. Ayumu's struggle seems real. I never want to return to the days where I felt like him, but it's fantastic to see someone write out how it feels to struggle through the endless nothing of depression for months on end. Well done!