I had a lot of fun reading the story lol. The art style helped too

This was a fun read, think I got all the ends. It never seems like it's quite possible to fully grasp what's going on, and the metaphorical "door" and "thingie" are always sort of floating there. The horror here I think is half in the body horror, but half in the inability of the reader to get a concrete foothold. It's a neat effect.

The surrealistic and (at times) vivid illustrations helped the atmosphere. Maybellene's goofy sprites are all fantastic.  

The script could use some cleanup here and there for typos or to remove the stuff that sounds like stage directions (converting A WHILE LATER into a fade, for instance) but then again some of the disjointedness of the story comes down to disjointedness in the script, and it might not have the same feel.

I honestly really enjoyed the art, it was fairly simplistic but at the same time tied together the whole feel of the game really well.

the story was pretty interesting too I found my self invested as the story progressed though im not sure what happens if you run to the bathroom as I decided to fight her!

overall it was pretty enjoyable i'd love to see where this game leads and your future projects :D