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Heart wrenching!

Very well told. Great stuff.

Okay, so you said you were worried about the low amount of ranking and comments. I had to read it and see what you created. I am glad I did. Yours is in the top tier for me. Original and a great climax making you feel bad for the poor folks in the story. Great story and enjoyed the format.

Ewwwww. How grim... How dark. Great use of civvies as the lens for experiencing the unfolding horror of a grimdark future.

Nice work! The tone of the story was laid down incredibly, just like your previous entry. You're very good at that. I loved what the story insinuates, it reminds me of the "moment of change" that can be found in 5 minute short films.

There are some places where the illusion of someone writing a letter falls flat, such as the scene where he's writing about the defense gun thuds. It damaged my immersion into the story, but quickly recovered.

All in all, I only have high praise. I continue to look forward to your next work!