I agree with marisalovesusall. The song has some potential behind it. But it needs a LOT of mixing. Take some time to learn how velocity, modulation, and expression work and use them in your piece. You could also stand to add some more instruments—a bit of percussion, more strings, some woodwinds or brass.

Nice motifs and harmony, though a little repetitive. Badly mixed expression, and boring arranging.

Has potential, will be a really awesome track after some rework.