Except for some minor things that other posters have brought up in other topics, this is a really, REALLY good fanwork, especially for free. Honestly, I'm kicking myself for reading it this early on in development as it will be a long while before it's finished. The wait will suck. I'm not complaining though as this is a free work and anybody expecting anything made quickly from something they don't even need to pay for is entitled. It's my fault for trying something before it's finished. Keep up the good work. I look forward to future chapters!