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Look, it's fine that the MC is the only guy, that's good. What's not good is how you've developed the LIs. If you wanted to create a group of LIs who would be unappealing to harem fans, you've nailed it. The childhood friend who posts nude photos online and asks the MC to take pictures of themselves having sex so she can upload them to her account is a wonderful way to waste a LI. The succubus femdom/rape scene is disastrous considering most harem fans hate femdom. And having an LI tell the MC that she needs to eat semen to maintain her human form isn't going to make her appealing (what will happen is that the average fan will ask questions they don't want to ask, and the answer to which is something that doesn't reflect well on said LI).

One recommendation is that it's best to know as little as possible about the LI's sexual past. And fetishes, it's best if they discover them with the MC (as long as the fetish isn't being a porn actress, as is the case with the childhood friend, then it's best not to experiment with it at all).

I actually don't think it's difficult to modify the dialogue to make the LIs more appealing. For example, the succubus could convince the MC to have sex (you could even make her a virgin because, well, a normal succubus isn't going to be very popular with harem fans due to her more than questionable past; removing the possibility of said past by making her a virgin will make her more appealing). As for the one who needs semen to maintain her human form, this only create some umpleasant questions (how has she maintained her human form for years? Guess what you're thinking... Exactly what you're thinking), so it's better to modify this and use something that avoid that scenario. The childhood friend who posts nude photos and wants to use the MC to make porn... there's no solution unless you completely change her story.

Can we make it so that the only one who has sex with the girls, on screen or off, is the MC?

Are minigames avoidable?

The nightclub thing sounds bad, not to say horrible. I also don't know what it's like to satisfy their needs without having sex; the truth is, it almost seems contradictory to me.  Finally, you mentioned that there are three possible choices, but you only listed two.

The question is, are they exclusive both on and off screen? Because I get the impression that quite a few girls have relationships with other guys off screen, and the only thing that happens is that you don't show it in the game.

Is the Matchmaker app optional?

Is there any way to avoid the minigames?

I hope the Matchmaker app is optional.

Is Devil Lair an app where the MC is just another one of the guys who has sex with the girls, or are all the girls with which the MC is in contact his exclusive?

Is the MC the only one who has sex with all the girls?

I like the idea of turning the girls into his lovers. What worries me is the NTR. I don't like other guys having sex with the MC's LIs at all, and I'm even less happy about them stealing the LIs. So it would be nice to know the type of NTR and if it's avoidable.

Will it be possible to play without a time limit from the beginning, without having to complete the game first?

The time limit kills my interest in the game. If the paid version removed the time limit from the beginning, I suppose it would be worth it, but since I'm not going to play through more than one ending, it's not worth paying for it.

Ok, no es que me gusten muchos fetiches aparte del exhibicionismo.

A mi no me gusta ni la dominación ni el BDSM y no pienso seguir una ruta romántica con Aoi.  Lo cierto es que si no hay venganza no creo que me interese el juego.  Como he comentado, hasta que el MC se haya vengado de ella no podré disfrutar del resto del juego.

Personalmente creo que deberías permitir que la gente que lo quiera pueda vengarse de ella de una forma más directa y que la eliminase del juego, habrá más gente como yo que no quieran tener nada sexual con ella (y vengarse de alguna forma) pero que quieran tener un romance con el resto de LIs.

En realidad no soy muy fan de venganzas sexuales.  No me gusta el BDSM (si en un juego me cabrean lo suficiente para querer torturar a alguien querré que sea especialmente sangriento, como arrancarle las uñas, usar un taladro para perforarle las rodillas, despellejar su espalda a latigazos, y cosas similares, no busco placer sexual, sólo la tortura por la tortura misma y a ser posible que deje cicatrices permanentes).  

De las rutas que has puesto sólo me gusta el romance (y el exhibicionismo, pero la parte "y otros" no la tengo tan clara).  No me gusta ni la donimación ni la sumisión y ya he comentado antes que tampoco el BDSM.  Así que lo único que se me ocurre como venganza es meterla en una ruta romántica falsa (y a ser posible sin sexo, tener sexo con ella es de las cosas que me disgustaría que sucedan) para al final traicionarla y que la encarcelen de por vida o la dejarla encerrada en una mazmorra de la que no hay escapatoria o cualquier otra cosa similar. Lo importante es que ella sepa por qué lo haces, que nunca te importó una mierda y que estás disfrutando con lo que ocurre.

De todos modos, mientras el MC no se vengue de ella de alguna forma, no voy a ser capaz de disfrutar del resto juego.

Ok, en español, con el ejemplo, resulta claro cuál es el significado que tiene (sin él podría dar lugar a alguna confusión).  A lo mejor es más claro escribirlo de otra forma, pero tampoco es algo tan importante, sólo era un comentario por si considerabas apropiado modificarlo.  Que yo al leerlo haya entendido otra cosa no significa que todo el mundo lo haya hecho, igual soy el único que llegó a esa conclusión visto que nadie más lo ha comentado.

¿Vamos a poder matar a Aoi?. Ahora mismo lo único que me interesa realmente del juego es vengarme de ella de una forma sangrienta y no sexual.

Creo que en la definición de roles (relación) del MC con las otras personas de la casa hay varios puntos a mejorar.

Primero que tal y como lo has escrito resulta poco claro.  Cuando dices: "inserte la relación del MC hacia Akiko (por defecto: propietaria de vivienda)"  Yo sobreentiendo que lo que hay que establecer es qué es el MC respecto de Akiko (hijo, padre, amigo, conocido, inquilino, casero, etc.), pero lo que aparece por defecto nos deja claro que lo que tenemos que escribir es qué es Akiko respecto del MC (casera, madre, hija, hermana, lo que sea) y pasa lo mismo con las siguientes.

Segundo, yo diría que "propietaria de vivienda" no es una relación entre dos personas.  Seguramente casea, arrendadora sería más apropiado para este caso.

Tercero, más que "Compañero de cuarto", creo que sería más apropiado "compañero de piso", salvo que literalmente estén compartiendo habitación.

I guess we can avoid entering the brothel.

What I want is for it not to happen (and I understand by skipping it that it happens anyway and you just don't see it)

In the end, can that scene be avoided or not? (The one with the witch held by a giant hand and semen in her mouth, and really any scene where the MC isn't the sole male representative)

Is the MC the only one who has sex and a romantic relationship with the girls on the island?

I guess we both assume that avoiding it means it doesn't happen at all.

I hope femdom, femboy, futa, mindbreak, emotionless and prostitution can be avoided.

It doesn't sound good to me.

And what exactly happens in the reveal?  Is there something sexual or is it just being told?

And we have to watch it? I can't think of any reason to want to watch it. In fact, what I can tell you is that I don't want to have to watch it, even if it's just what someone's imagining.

Is it possible to avoid trans content?

Can BDSM and yandere LIs be avoided? On the other hand, I'm not a big fan of group content because it's usually an excuse to sneak in lesbian content by claiming "technically it isn't lesbian." But I still don't like it.

I only like the option where the girls know and accept that the MC is with other girls. So when you know for sure, let me know and I'll know if the game might interest me or not.

But do the LIs know you're with others or are you basically cheating on them all?

Is this a harem game in which we can romance all the LIs at the same time, with them knowing and consenting, and have all of them at the end of the game or do we need to choose one at some point?

After reading the game's plot, I'm interested to know if there really will be revenge (one worthy of spending 7 years in prison) and whatever it is, I hope it's not anything sexual.

Is this a harem game, or will we have to choose between all the LIs at some point?

I'm not saying it has to be a kinetic novel; what I'm saying is that those two specific choices at the beginning of the game aren't a good idea, and removing them would have improved the game.

On the other hand, after watching the beginning of the bathroom scene, I decided it was much better for the protagonist to continue sleeping. But apparently, the game continues as if that scene had happened anyway:

If the game is about choosing the correct random option or dying (50% for each), it's going to be horrible. I'm already fed up with the first two choices (in fact, it's twice what I consider appropriate). I don't see what this can gain, other than annoying the player. In my opinion, it would have been better to not include any options at all and make that part completely linear (eliminating the disappointing choices).

Can you avoid the succubus? And I'd also like to avoid the childhood friend who posts nude photos online.

It would be nice to know which Futa characters are so you can avoid them.

After playing the minigames, I have to say they're awful. Almost as awful as the occasional ads that popped up warning you whether the chances of another guy taking one of the LIs had increased or decreased. It's a good thing the game will never have NTR; a guy can simply steal your LIs, which isn't NTR at all. Personally, I only like these kinds of competitions if they're rigged and the MC always wins, and even then, if they don't exist in the game, even better.I've read that this is going away from the game, so I'm going to remove this part.

I hope the minigames can be made optional.

That's what I supposed. I guess that's where my game ends. In any case, good luck.

Will there be a way to save Eira or is what happens definitive?

Well, look, I'm going to keep talking here and asking questions just to annoy you.

Is it mandatory to play the minigames or can we skip them?