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This is a novel idea, a reality tv show a la The Bachelor/Bachelorette or Love Island but in VN format! There's some good stuff bubbling up between the long monologues and meandering narrative, namely that the characters don't all seem to immediately have the MC in mind for finding their true love and that this game show is somewhat freeform. Unfortunately, the narrative would benefit greatly from having a bit more focus on the MC and also trimming some repeated lines and sentiments. I would highly recommend watching some reality tv shows like those mentioned in the beginning of this comment.

Other than that, I'm happy you found time to feature nearly ALL of the provided sprites!

I would never tire of these kinds of tabletop fantasy-esque stories. This one is a very merry read, and I really love the art style. I've only seen some of your other art, so I'm happy to know that you're a great writer too! I can't wait to see what else you cook up, whether it's a continuation of this questline or if other stories call for you.

Went in blind and was surprised by the very unwell looking Ned! The prose flowed well and I liked the ambient world building. Rather short and sweet despite the contents of the story.

I went in blind and was not expecting a lot of the kinks in the game! I should read the summaries more...

Besides that, the offbeat and colorful prose is probably my favorite part of this VN! The drawings, especially the animations, are quite good. That ending was out of nowhere, which honestly made me appreciate the story more. Great job!

Goodness gracious, let's go and rate this.

The presentation is really well done, from the title screen, to the opening and closing credits, and the music and sound design is very engaging. I love how ethereal and vibey the prose is, and the use of repetition throughout the story (namely "Come, my Prince") makes this feel like a poem more so than a story. Either way, I enjoyed this a LOT.

This is a personal interpretation, and also a spoiler for those who didn't read the VN yet so I'm putting this next part in rot13.

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Speculation about the Prince aside, the ambiguous nature of the ending and the flowery prose gives this a very story book feel. Congrats, Kraaj!

I quite enjoyed the banter between the characters! The reasons for why the cult kidnapped Nigel is sparse, the lack of threat from the cult or the monster, the flow and prose, and the lack of sound would have made me rate this lower, but the cheesy love that both Apollo and Nigel have and the cute sprites really carry this VN. Great job with this one!

Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed the "Him" and "Monster" bits, trying to create a story with only the protagonist and antagonist was hard so it's good to know the set up I have did well! I'll have the VN completed sometime after the voting phase is over, so thanks again for the review! It means a lot to me ;w;

aaaa, thank you purkka for the feedback. I'll keep those in mind as I finish the VN! The sound design was harder than creating the cgs and sprites. It means a lot to me that you enjoyed the parts i did write, aaa.

Thank you!!! I will finish it once the voting phase is over, and thank you for the help.

Thank you!!! I didn't expect to be so busy these past two months, but I will have an update ready for next year!

This is a very cozy, chill read! The sprites were well made and I loved the backgrounds and the music. Very minor nitpicks - the text box and side sprites fading in and out was a little distracting, and the music could use a fade in or fade out to make things a little smoother. Other than those two things, I really enjoyed this VN! Great job!

Thank you! I'm glad you like the art style, I had a lot of fun trying to figure out how things should look. The game will be updated to have more story and art in the future, so I apologize for how short the visual novel is.

No worries! The art style won't take a drastic change, I actually planned on keeping it this simple and loose from the beginning! Thanks for the kind words!

Wasn't aware this was a shitpost given short story form. Was given probably my favorite probably unintentional bug in any VN I've read (see below). I do sorta wanna see what other projects you can do, cuz for a shitpost this genuinely made me laugh and cringe.

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I quite enjoyed the amount of slang and the vibes the characters gave off. Not the most narratively compelling of the VNs I've read, but definitely the most impressive due to the fact that there was a LOT more to the premade sprites than I thought, so that was cool how you implemented them. I just sorta wished that the Misery character wasn't the narrator and instead an active character within the movie. It would make things flow much better.

I love the idea of the afterlife being a sort of purgatory of a person's life changing moment, which in this case was a video store. I could sort of see where the story would go after I realized that the wolf was having his life literally flash before his eyes. Still! I didn't really feel sold on the "giving up memories" portion because there wasn't any discernable downsides to such a choice. Still a very nice read and I do feel like if this one had a tiny bit more time I would enjoy it more cuz I can see the vision. It just didn't cook long enough.

Short , but slightly confusing! It feels like there wasn't enough time to properly end the story, and I do wonder what would happen after! Great job with this one, just wish there was a bit more story here. It's ok so far.

It's good! The writing is by far my most favorite within the VN, with the art a very close second. I don't really remember much about the UI or music, but they were there as well. The branching paths was a surprise but getting all the endings was a bit of a pain. It took a couple of read throughs before I caught the "expansion" theme that I can only tell happens in the "good" ending with the enlarged heart.

By far the most character I've seen in all the submissions I've read so far. The art is full of life and energy, and my gods I'm so happy DECO*27 is in here.  I don't have much to add other than the only nitpick I have is the "epilogue" after Haruto steels their resolve to be Akuma's boyfriend and the screen fades to black. That would have been a good stopping point instead of the scene in the shed. That felt like it could have been an unlockable side story after reading the whole story. Still! I enjoyed this VN a lot.

The art style is very cute, I love it. I also like the idea of separating the story into 3 acts with a poem, but it feels like it could have been done better. Asides from that, it would have also been nice to have a clearer picture painted of the social landscape of the story at the beginning. The theme for "expansion" is also done subtly within the text itself, with lirself learning to be more compassionate and empathetic. ALSO! One of the first VN's that I've read that have neopronouns! 

It's implied that the "expansion" is the black hole but it took a few reads for me to get that part.

Theme aside, this is I think of my favorites within the jam simply because of how evocative the writing is and the stellar music. It helps that the UI looks sleek. I'm just blown away by the premise. This is great.

EDIT: sorry for the multiple comments!

Oh, wasn't expecting Attack on Titan-esque story here. I don't really mind,  but I do wish there was a bit more of a build up towards the giant showing up. I think it's cuz I watched a bit of the anime, but the fight scene was done well but I'm unsure how people who haven't seen the anime would react to the pacing. I do look forward to the completion of this project, mainly cuz I haven't seen any actual macro VNs.

This is a lovely and quick read. I don't really see how it fits within the "expansion" theme, but what is there is cute! Love that True is an old grey muzzle and that Lupus is a short king. I don't really see much of these in VNs I've read, so it was refreshing!