I see some green cubes and darkness and fading effect. Wish we could have seen more. Good work on the pitch!
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Congrats on a complete game! The gameplay felt fine and even though it was a wall of text and some parts were contrived the story was pretty good for a short game. Good humor in the humorous parts. Lots of places to explore may have meant lots of frustration for players, but the secret ending felt rewarding.
Fun, and I liked the interactive/exploration elements for a twine game.
Noticed a couple errors:
"But you opponent is the void for now."
I think "you" should be "your" here
"It's parting gift a hole where you sit."
I think "It's" should be "Its" here, and you were just running so it is a little jarring that you are suddenly sitting. Maybe you meant to say stand?
Overall I thought it was crisp, short, and thought provoking.
Thank you for the feedback! Yeah I only had weekends to work on this so it is definitely small, but I thought it was still worth submitting since they are looking for 10 minute experiences. I am curious what you thought was lacking, or in what way was it lacking, just in general for next time.
I put an mp3 file in the same folder, and then after the final html export from Twine, I edited the html file:
<li id="credits">This story was created with <a href="<a href=" http:="" twinery.org="" "="">http://twinery.org/</a>">Twine and is powered by <a href="<a href=" http:="" tiddlywiki.com="" "="">http://tiddlywiki.com/</a>">TiddlyWiki</li>
So right after that I inserted my own:
<li><audio controls style="width:130px;height:60px;"><source src="TheFallofArcana.mp3" type="audio/mpeg">Your browser does not support the audio element.</audio></li>