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I'm sorry to hear bringing on other writers into the project didn't work out for you.

I would encourage you to not be fearful of making mistakes in your writing, don't be so hard on yourself.

What ever troubles you are facing I hope that you can take solace in the knowledge that with this project you've made there is a lot to be proud of.

I look forward to reading more of your work, and thank you for entertaining me!

 When it comes to the AI thing I just don't know where or if a line should be drawn. Ultimately it is a tool, and like any tool it can be misused. How ever if we shun the use of AI all together should we also shun tools like spell check?

All I see coming from railing against AI is the wrongful persecution of authors and artists who don't even use it by internet trolls who will rile up the masses with false accusations.  

 That being said you shouldn't feel inferior to the AI writing tool, and don't fear imperfections in your work for they will show your humanity.
You don't want characters that speak with perfect grammar all the time in every situation, it makes them feel less real.

I'll throw no stones at those who choose to use AI, but I will encourage everyone to make every effort to embrace their own creativity errors and all.

A lot of stables went out of business when the automobile was invented, does that mean there aren't any stables now in the modern era?  

It might mean little for a stranger to say this, but I've enjoyed what you've written so far of Light My Way and look forward to reading more. 

Remember that your works will be valued by others simply because you took the time to tell us a story.  When you write something, and share it on the internet a piece of your creativity is preserved  there forever.

I enjoyed this, truly. I think Baxter is going to be a big fan favorite, he is certainly mine!

yay!

Yay!

Hotter?  I don't know, that is too subjective for me, but they are certainly way too hot for side character status. I hope the guards get their own VN spin off some day.

Deleted my post since the offending comment is now gone, but thank you.

Oh, got it, thanks!

At the end of the credits there is an option to view the gallery and ???   when I click on the triple question marks I see a quick flash of images but then it brings me back to the title screen, and I cannot seem to find the short stories. 

I'm disappointed in these developments. I enjoy both TSR and Cienei and I'm sad that what appears to be a petty squabble is getting treated as an unforgivable crime thus leading to the halt in development of one of the VNs I like.

Dang that was a fast fix! It really shows how much you care for your work, be proud!

The hot spring scene with Opa, the SFW black censor bar... it.... doesn't cover everything... Old codger was just too big for it... lol

Best wishes and hopes for a swift recovery.

Almost Nut Experience, really!?  hahaha!

Thank you, be proud of your work here! I'm certain this VN is destined to become a classic!

*spoilers











Is it weird that despite the MC's pov I have found nothing that Marrowyn has said or done to be creepy or unexpected?

Maybe I'm just bias for Marrowyn because I'm not so secretly hoping the MC accidentally gets a little bit smooshed by his belly while they are in an elevator or something! Eheheh...

Good job! I'm really looking forward to reading more. Be proud of your work!

Can do!  and yes I did enjoy it, looking forward to reading more!

This story has a great foundation to build on! Good job, looking forward to reading more!

This team really should be proud of their work!  Five of Five stars!

because what you call the mc isn't actually the mc... The king's guard is! You're just seeing them through the eyes of the king.

But if you want a capable mc try the Smoke Room... Sam is a big strapping lad who can take care of himself.

No need to apologize, that was said in jest!
I'm looking forward to reading more, and good luck with everything!

Specifics?  Oh no! The exact follow up question I feared when I made my comment!

Well, here goes!  Deep breath!

Spoilers

First the reader is presented with two possible outcomes, both are super bad for someone if not every one.  With no quarter given to the “there must be some other way” train of thought the story has a kind of “if you’re expecting a happy ending you’re not paying attention”  sorta vibe.

All the themes you warned of such as substance use, mental health issues, extreme trauma, suicidal/homicidal thoughts and the very idea of people that are afflicted by such holding the fate of every one else in their hands. (Mainly because that’s real life where I live.)

 Next comes the idea of unending nose and ear bleeds! The tunnel, all the blood, vomit and such, I simply found text descriptions of these things to be more disturbing than VNs that rely on visual cues to portray this because my imagination does so much worse to me with descriptive words.

Lastly… Reuben!  So much with this one alone!  Innards!  Licking said innards! The copious amount of times he said “and again” in the second bed time story!  The first bedtime story!  but mostly some of the views he expressed such as hostility towards an entire group of people despite many of those people must have been grown well after the events that he is resentful for.  Also I feel specifically called out by a comment he made about docile people since that’s my natural disposition as a person.

Well that about wraps it up, and again I must emphasize that none of this is meant as criticism, with out such elements it would be difficult to write such a compelling story.

Ps. I like the way Neo is drawn and I hope to see more artwork of him beside the other characters. I know this might be difficult because the story is meant to be seen through his eyes so here is to me hoping for a mirror scene in the future!