I know this too, I also worked on a vn, I have a done prologue with cg, music, characters, choices, ect. But alone it's really hard. I had no time and space to create my own, so I hope you can! :D
And I was like waiting and waiting and WAITING since months ago. I waited for notification to be honest and I also follow the project. I thought it has a dead end, figures out you brang updates just Itch.io didn't show it in my feed. ;-;
You shouldn't take too much on you in a stressful situation. Moving out is already a huge deal and first of all, you are creating for us and not we. So please, take your time.
May I ask something? I'm not sure about the protagonist... Which one we play as? Or we have to imagine ourself in?
I'm still thinking about to try it out, I have to say I'm quiet curious, the thing is I usually wait with new projects to "sit a night" so it will taste better. I mean I tend to wait like half a year, so I can play it more than 10 minutes. (It's just an example. :D)
Actually it's a really hard method to play Klaus' route tbh... I did once but I can't remember how, I played through all the possibility Though. Just try out the most relevant choices for him. But yeah, I couldn't say there are "routes" because it's about everybody, so you must hard focus on your ideal.
I... I don't know what to say. As I first saw Clyde I knew immediately he's my type. Like a Bonnie and Clyde relationship, hmmm, the realisation suddenly hit when I write this it's not an "accident"
I just suddenly felt I'm alive by his side as the protagonist. It made me desire for that like of a life. Also his eye scar is so damn charming, also the way he's speaking... Reminds me of somebody I miss.
Sweet words, thank you too. :) It always fills my heart with joy if I can make somebody happy. :) But I may have a bit of a mean request. At this visual novel, please don't improve, because you will lose it's magic and this is the last thing I want to. The art style also has it's "icon" to the game.
I wish I could work on mine vn too, I just can't stop focusing on my draw-style, but still I can't stand the feeling if it's not the best of me, I will never improve to the level I want to because I will feel like it's never enough what I can do. But certainly, nice stories always make me to gather my hopes and the will to try again. :)
This story is really imperfect but I must tell you, your story is in my top favourites. I knew right after I started to read it in November of 2020, like the visuals of the characters are "weak", but I had a feeling it's something special. Fuck, who needs brainless Bara novel when you have Cor?
Anyway, I just realised today why your story is so great and it's because your own world. It's your own desire and the reason why you are so good at it is a bit of a blur to me, but it feels like you are an other-wordly visitor.
This is why your imperfect story is just perfect. It's about the desires to escape to another great world and this is what I want to.
I don't think it's as planned as others mentioned, like because of the bg and anything, it's simple, the story is your view. You selected the right bg's by your feelings. Everything is in match. Your masterpiece is just gives the "calm" vibes because it's, I dunno how should I put it in words... What I want to say is, I don't think you stress it. It has it's own natural laws and this is why I describe it as "calm". No rush, no hurry, everything has its time. I want more. ♡ Man, I always knew this is a special one, but this is the second or the third story what gave me the biggest chills on my spine. I missed to sleep with Mike though.
Hey guys, I have a problem. I wanted to install the update, but I've got another icon and actually I have my saves on the old one. :/ I'm playing on android.
Actually, I had an exboyfriend and this exboyfriend of mine was same with Oscar, exclude I was higher than him, but he was a muscle stud as well xd I liked him so much, I just never felt he is my true one, sadly. Sometimes I miss him and it's fine every now and then. It feels good to play Oscar's role.
I'm was somewhere between Wallace and Lucas in that relationship, I just feel guilty I've never been able to look at myself how I treat him also to say sorry. He was such a nice guy and flirty but in the stupidest way, GOSH, HOW HE THOUGHT IT'S COOL TO TEASE ME WITH HIS IDIOTEST SEXIST JOKES GODDAMN IT. But in the end we remained friends. He told me he never found someone like me and I'm so proud of it. I hope he's doing well.
You said you want a feedback though, if you can improve somewhere is more at coding and writing. But I dunno if it's you writing style, so its fine too.
I missed the transitions a bit, but I got used to it soon. The thing is with the writing part is you should tell more, but don't EXACTLY tell it. For an example:
After George called my mother, I felt anxiety. It made me feel sick.
Instead of this, it would be more effective like this:
George... What did you just do? Oh no... This is not good. Suddenly I find myself shaking. No, this is can't happening! What should I say to her?! This was a bad idea after all... But I have no choice. I take the phone with my trembling hands from George, and...
Or something like this, it depends on how do you want to visualise Adam. Also it makes your story longer in words.
Also it's a visual novel, so if you really want to wish a big one, then you shall visualise the protagonist's feelings, like if Adam feels anxious, you should make the screen shaking or the bg into a waving motion. I didn't try it out back then, but it shouldn't be too hard. Ren'Py has a really wonderful tutorial about these tricks.
But on the contrary, I hope you don't want to improve too much, because you own this little magic in your story and I already like it. Also, unpopular stories are special and sometimes I looking for the ones like yours. I'm glad I found you, keep up the hard work please! ♡
Thank you for the reply, I wouldn't mind playing on PC, the problem are my parents, even if I'm 22, I prefer to read alone. ^^ If you creating your vn with Ren'py, then maybe I can give you a helping hand about how to make an android build, because I was struggling with it a lot. :s (Luckily, I got proper help in other dc servers)
Though I can't guarantee, because everybody's pc is different, for an example mine is in a horrible condition, so I spent days to figure it out what stuff I need to have, like java or dunno. :D So for 1 word's end with 100, android build is a tricky one, but once you figured it out, it will be easy next time.
So if you need help with it, just ask for my discord, maybe I will be useful for once in my life.
Man, why does it hurt so much... At this point I feel like I want to spend time with Tora instead of Kouya... I have this hard guilty pressure on me on his route. :c
Hi! If it's not a problem and if I'm allowed, I want to try to draw a fanart of Jeffrey and Ted for you. '^^ I'm not sure if I can succes though, because I'm a beginner artist. But at least I want to try to say thank you for your hard work. ♡
Ah, and btw, Does Klaus got a route? I just wonder because I can't really contact with him. :/ The last thing with him was the nightmare and when I played Devon's route I met him with the telescopes, but I dunno how to get in a room with him or how to pick up the route with him. '^^
Man, why does it hurt so much... At this point I feel like I want to spend time with Tora instead of Kouya... I have this hard guilty pressure on me on his route. :c