Yeah, I was actually thinking of making the boring beginning part even longer so that the climax had more effect on the reader but was restrained by the date. Retaining interest is quite difficult, something I'm still improving on but I'm glad that you felt an increase in investment as the story went on.
Completely agree with the constructive criticism. Definitely thinking about expansion but I'm hesitant as I believe that it won't get as much reach as it did through the jam. Any advice on how to create a returning audience?
