Honestly, I just now started this VN, but the grammar is so bad, that I find myself unable to look past it. Being relatively new to this genre of games, I have noticed that is not an uncommon issue. I do find the premise interesting, but as I said, I don't think I can continue this game because of the grammatical issues.
I also realize that the game devs may not necessarily be English-primary speakers, but it would be great if somebody would grammar check the dialogue.
SO far, while this game's writing is not as bad as some, but there are enough errors to make things awkward.
Example (from this game when Theodora is first introduced):
Ex. 1
"This woman, Theodora, my norminal fiancee, daughter of ShinyRost Inc's president. ShinyRost is one of the biggest companies in this city."
Not a lot of people use the word "norminal" especially in this context. Hell I had to look it up...
Could/should be:
"This is Theodora, and despite what I said earlier about wanting to find love, I am engaged to her."
"Now before we get into that, I need to explain that this is an arranged situation."
"Her father is the head of a large conglomerate called, ShinyRost Inc., and has close ties to my mother, both in, and outside of business."
Ex. 2
"Although we have engaged, there is no actual romance between us. We were just obeying our parents' wishes."
Could/should be:
"Although we're engaged, as I mentioned, this is an entirely artificial engagement."
"At some point, it seems that her father and my mother both agreed that it would be mutually beneficial if their offspring were to marry."
Yes, that may go a little beyond the grammar itself, but again, I only point this out to point out how a little more writing (with better grammar) could draw out the characters and story a little further.
I hope that you do not take offense, but I just would really like to point out how much further the story could be drawn out just through the writing.
I certainly could not create a game, and I really do appreciate all your hard work and effort that goes into creating something like this.
I do wish you all the best!