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Apologies again for my inadequate explanation. I'm trying to suggest that, essentially, you're going to have to write backwards. Flesh things out and adjust pacing. Eventually, you're probably going to come to this conclusion on your own.
I am being an armchair commander and an ass though, and even my apologies are sounding superficial and assinine. Sorry for being an insufferable know it all. I really do respect you a great deal, for being able to carry through a complex project like this to such a point, and for really putting yourself out there. I'm sorry if I only served to embitter you with poorly aimed criticisms, and hope you'll ignore naysayers like myself and keep doing your good work.

No, I get that. You're right though, my criticism is mean spirited here, and I do apologize for that. It was uncalled for. That said, I hope that you slow the stories roll, and focus far less on such a broad cast, and instead on deepening the relationships already presented.

This really needs some rewriting. The pacing is terrible, characters that are actually interesting are abandoned constantly in favor of new faces without a chance to really develop, let alone letting anything romantic develop. It feels like only the primary plot is given consideration, and the rest is just a vehicle to drive the plot forward... meaning it becomes difficult to invest in any of these empty characters.

Smart move. People aren't looking for gameplay nearly as much as developers in the field seem to believe. I personally only want story. I hate dealing with sandboxes, the most popular way to do things right now, and much prefer a kinetic novel myself, that is willing to let you get into characters and situations via story rather than cheap mechanics that will never be satisfying. Mechanics are something I struggle through only if the writing and characters and themes are good enough to warrant the effort.

This game cracks me up. The porn isn't half as good as the running joke its self of the mc being a messiah figure to those he screws, or just hangs around. It's a great absurdist power fantasy, and we need more of those.

Waiting for my revenge on the monster girl who gave me crap for leveling >:O

Them monster gals made a journey I had to get stronger to succeed in, don't give me shit for being good at it, ho!

A masculine male main character, who's powerful, skilled, and competent, instead of just depressed and broken. Who's dangerous. What a fucking breath of fresh air.

NPC MC. Can't relate to this moronic, spineless simp.

Mastercard, nothing. But institutional investors are willing to lose a LOT of money on Disney to keep that propaganda machine rolling, billions in losses and they just voted to make sure nothing changes at all. The real muscle holds the line. Pelts couldn't do anything about it in the end. There's a lot going on at all times, money moves, and it tells stories. Why not take a look? By the end of that rabbit hole, you'll look at this stuff a lot differently.

I'm not talking about them. I'm talking about a field that see's increased regulation so that the fruits of the patrolled field can be reaped by some company or other that has the right connections. Could be anything, so long as they play the DEI and ESG fields as prescribed by the institutional investors that control our entire economy. You can't watch the same thing happen in near to every sector in our economy and not suspect it reaches further. From medicine to military, newsrooms to payment providers. Increased regulations are paving the way for something else, most of the time.

While I'm miffed too at the current lack of content warnings, you gotta understand, they have no business anymore if they go by the increasingly draconian ruleset designed to drive independent creators and small studios to the brink so institutional providers won't have competition anymore. If you know anything about capitalist business history, you'll see the patterns. What they can and can't do and still expect a return on their work is growing worse and worse by the day. Cut them some slack.

Save people some time... you get raped in this game. A lot. Humiliated, a lot. You're helpless, a lot. I was quite enjoying it up until all the rape. Then it just got super depressing.

This is one of my favorite VN's, and not just for smut. It's the kind of power epic that I adore, and your story and characters are amazing. It's art, and I hope to see it finished some day.

Rimming... that's something I just can't get into. Could use a 'fuck no' option.

Take care of your health! Love the game to bits, love the world you've crafted and the characters you've breathed life into. I can give you some good health advice if you want, to keep sickness and disease away. Flu season isn't fun, unless you happen to never get the flu, because you understand your dietary needs. Then you get to point and laugh at those who don't understand why they're so miserable a week out of every year.
It's fun.

This is a time of rampant poverty, in nearly every nation. People aren't 'stingy'. They're broke, and worse.

Any chance of a chance to grind and reap the benefits of being op? I know that goes against the pacing of the game, and you can hardly make essentially two separate games for the option, given the investments that'd require.

Some part of me still holds out hope, though.

I understand what you're going for with the time management aspect of your character growth, but I believe a major portion of your audience, myself included, would like to be able to 'free train'. To slow down the story for a little while to grind. Maybe unbalancing, but your audience is largely looking for power fantasies, so I would hope, worth consideration.