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I let out a groan loud enough to startle my cats at Holden Magroin, good job on that. Might have to steal that one for my next DnD character.

I got this game through the bundle, and I have to say that I really enjoy what you've released so far! The use of multiple origins is fun, especially when they subtly reference each other (though the poor Ambassador doesn't seem to have a clue that the Nomad exists). All the different stories are interesting, and I love all the characters a lot. Enough that the two month timeline makes me pout a little, haha! Not that I'm surprised though, three different stories in one game is...a lot of work. 

That being said, there are a lot of typos and text errors. I've played all 3 routes, and Nomad was definitely the cleanest. There were LOTS of apostrophes that I'm pretty sure were supposed to be hyphens, and a couple instances of repeated text. And a totally minor thing: when I got to the "End of Chapter 2" splash card, it gets stuck there, and I don't have any option but to completely close out the game. Maybe give the option to go back to the main menu? (I was playing on Steam, if that makes a difference for anything I've said)

There was also one story bit that kinda made me go "wait what" in the Knight route: my squire was replaced by an assassin, and I didn't even think to check up on him???? He wasn't even mentioned for the rest of the chapter! Not even a "Raiden what did you do with poor Maddox?" or a "I catch up with my flustered looking squire at the carriages as I prepare to leave". I'll accept that the MC wouldn't think he's dead, but did I just leave him tied up in some corner of the jousting grounds?  :'(

But all in all, the story and characters flow very organically together, the art is beautiful, and I am eagerly awaiting future chapters!