Sounds excellent. Looking forward to this profession and the breakdown. I'm thinking about creating a digital card set and potentially a region for Glide inspired by Dragon's Heaven.
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Damn. I was hoping to get a book but was only able to get to this now.
Anyway.
Page listings in PDF viewer are off by one. i is listed as ii, etc. Not sure if that matters or not.
page i - first mention of Prompts section lists it incorrectly as "Prompt".
Page ii - "To use them, all you need to do is drop a coin, point a finger, or whatever else..." - needs clarification on the last bit. Sentence sounds awkward.
Page xxi - do we need to find the relationship between the helpful character and the resource? Needs disambiguation.
Page xxii - "Overthinking it is Unhelpful"
Appendix 5 - Do you think General Multiplayer Rules should go ahead of the Journaling and Quick Games rules sections? You mention things in those that are then covered in the general multiplayer rules. Makes it seem as if sections are out of order.
Page 143 - to read as: "For example, early in the game I create Brecht, an American Civil War veteran. He stokes the fire at the Antarctic retreat, and in a later Prompt I determine that Brecht stole my Diary."
Page 144 - "I think I want to create a vampire in early Eastern Europe..."
Page 145 - Have you made 4 or 5 memories? 1. Roza; 2. Piotr; 3. Hania; 4. Vyri; 5. ? - am I missing one?
That should be it. I haven't dug into the game yet so i left the Prompts as surprises for when i play the game. Plus, left interviews alone because that's not things that can or should be changed.
Hope these help!